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[Haiku] Winter’s Awe






                          *
snowflakes  *    * 
                    *  *   
                      *   
a new dress    *
for naked branches




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  • Haiku Kin
    June 5

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    How cute! I love how you wrote this one. The little extra visual is like a cherry on top. Or, in my case, a blueberry (I'm not so fond of cherries).

    I don't like winter, but I must say, the trees sure are beautiful after a fresh snow. You've captured this wonderful moment so well. You truly have a way with haiku.

    Congratulations on the trophy!


    • Malabu
      June 5

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      I was bursting with creativity that day lol
      to me its golden
      Im still learning to express myself in haiku/senryu
      thanks for commenting and applause

      • Haiku Kin
        June 5
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        We're all "still learning" - but you're definitely further along than me.

        I also took a bit of inspiration from you, and have become more experimental in my visual depiction of my haiku.

        • Malabu
          June 5
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          be careful of creative exibitions...and presentation..i have had many people knock me down because of my and graphics and line placements...it could hurt you in a competition..lol

          just a warning! to strick so called rules...lol
          I dont care if I break them, its my style

          • Haiku Kin
            June 5
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            Point taken; thanks for the warning. I'll be more careful in contests, especially if I know I'm facing a strict judge. And hey, even Basho wrote the occasional two-line haiku, so why not?


  • Titus gold member
    November 30, 2008
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    well done, you've reached the second round

  • Titus gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    the visuals in this look like a quick journey to the town and Primark I'd suppose. Snow here is not going to stop you, nice work.


  • suseann
    November 21, 2008
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    Well this is a unique new style! And a lovely contructed one I must say.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    I love this one...
    It is so creative and made me smile...
    what a wonderful look at winter...
    love the snowflakes...
    Beautiful once again...
    Love,
    mystic


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    your poems are the reason i hug my computer

    Love, Lane


    • Malabu
      November 19, 2008
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      awwwwwe i love that thought...ill bet it feels warm too...

  • davidwright silver member
    November 19, 2008
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    Very nice. Good luck in the contest and happy trails


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    wonderful way to look at winter - very creative, and the spacing is something you are doing so well - asterisks - something different!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    see I would never thought of it that way,
    thanks because this morning our trees were all dressed in white, all I could think abot is shoveling.
    glass half full
    beautiful and uplifting
    God bless you my friend...


    • Malabu
      November 19, 2008
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      hope you're wearing boots... and here's a to keep you warm


  • KayJay
    November 18, 2008

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    Clever... not sure about the asterisks but the haiku is beautiful...
    Ken


  • Death of the Author
    November 18, 2008

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    Oh wow, brilliant - that's a really neat idea with the *

    As for the poem - very pretty.

    Good luck

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