King of the sea
Pass weary on thy love
Speak once!
And I shall shiver and die
O Beauty!
What makes thou divine?
O Romance! O Desire!
Tis true, my love?
Who taught thee to plead?
To silence thy soul with sorrow?
Unmask thine eyes
Mus’d upon by thee
O hear tell me!
What thine eyes must see?
Forgive thy longing
As I mute thine sweet lips
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I got so caught up in chatting with you yesterday that I completely forgot to comment. [Insert palm to forehead here.] I got to read it again, however, and I loved it even more the second time. There was a period in poetry when words were simple so to keep its memory alive, and it would be very hard to forget this. Have you thought of putting a melody behind it? It sounds very reminiscent of Blackmore's Night considering it lyrically. I find it wonderfully beautiful; very thoughtful. You do not need the luck for the contest. "To Love Thee" stands on its own humbling, strong merit.
Always,
Brit
(That third stanza gave me gooseflesh!)
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Ooooh old school english
LOve it, i like these kind of writes but dont know how to speak that way
Brilliantly writen my friend
All the best to you in the contest
and thanks for dropping by
Ken
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Old English is a wonderful style to write
and your Romeo setting along with his sweet Juliette fits perfectly in the word of Romance
I loved it hun
Julie
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