"I hate you and your pink belly bunny to!"
I shouted at the top of my lungs
"You hate me! Leave the bunny out of it!"
She cried out with such anger.
"Your little bunny is good as mine!"
I mumble under my breath.
Turning away in disgust,
I spot a pigtailed cutie.
"Come 'ere young lady, I have a proposal."
"sorry sir, I don't marry older men."
I smack my head, a little to hard,
and fall flat on a rusty bucket.
Recovering from the fall,
I pick the piranhas off my buttocks.
"OK, young lady,
you know that's not what I meant."
"Yes, but I had bought those piranhas on sale sir,
I had to use them some how." he...he...he
Beat red in anger, I try to hold back.
"Ok, young lady, Ill give you 10 pieces of gold."
her eyes brighten,
with a devilish glow.
"All you have to do,
is steal that rabbit, and give it a boot."
"Consider it done!"
I watched with glee as she walked off.
The cute little bunny,
and the one eyed owner...
Ive got them now,
shes making her approach.
without a word,
she rips the bunny out of her hands.
Shes dropping him,
winding up...
still winding up...
come on kick it already...
KAPOW!!!
My jaw drops in amazement!!!
"Young lady,
you get 20 gold pieces!"
She ran away in joy,
skipping right past the tear filled lady.
10 years later...
"The number you shall count to, is three..."
Author notes
lol, the only one Ive seen is "The Holy Grail." I hope this works, lol :-P. Cool contest by the way ;-)
A contest entry
- "and now for something completely different..." by thejollytinker.
1000 points, ended December 3, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"And the number of the counting shall be three..." That schtick gets me every time! Killer rabbits- AAAAWWWWW!
I knew you'd like this one for some reason?! Thanks man, check your "to's" for a missing "o!"
If you have to hurt someone, get "Live at the Hollywood Bowl," you won't be disappointed!! Gresham
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LOL, why thank you for the sweet editing :-). I changed the things that were suggested, and tried to make at least the dialogue a little clearer in the beginning.
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I wasn't quite sure what was going on through the poem until the last line, and even so, I'm still not quite sure I understand it. I can still correct some things in it, though.
First and foremost, your title can't have the word revengeance, since revengeance is not a word. You have to pick between revenge and vengeance, but don't try to use both. Also, in the line "Yes, but I had bought those pirahnas on sail sir," it should be sale, not sail. I think there's a couple more though. Just paste it into a word program and run it through a quick spell check to fix the things you've got misspelled. Overall, though, I liked it. It had a sort of witty undertone throughout the piece
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