I spurn created culture made for me,
with well-worn ethics, moral history.
Venomous jealousy, imagined sin,
you fantasize your false desires within
your masturbating mind. False, evil thought.
My deeds you rush to willingly distort.
I scorn your faith in legal lies, your vain,
accepted murders, laugh at your disdain
of pleasures frowned upon.
Yet envious,
you turn upon me sanctimonious.
I built strong armour to your covetousness,
supposed right to be contemptuous.
God cradles me
within his loving breast
and judges me
among his holiest.
Author notes
I drew the picture.
A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Pamela A Lamppa.
1700 points, ended January 20, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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"I spurn created culture made for me,"
Me too!
Too often people do not know how to take me and I have known and felt false, inaccurate judgments; still I hold myself to my own light and fear them not.
your words ring true to me.
Good luck
Ken
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"Yet envious, you turn upon me sanctimonious" Superb line, so perfect! And a strong testament to belief. I liked the alliteration and flow in this piece. Different for you, and refreshing.
I love the humbleness in your artwork as well. Excellent expression of emotion in art and words.
You have nailed the prompt with this powerful write. Impressive from beginning to end. Excellent work in this one. Best of luck in this round.
~Pamela 
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You are content with the life you have chosen and it shows in every line. I always enjoy the wonderful illustrations you create for your work. You are truly an artist in every sense of the word. I wish I had thought of "...false desires within your masturbating mind". Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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Great!
They who serve with lips and not with hearts will never find favour. Your poem has prophetic power, I like the accusation of "your faith in legal lies" mainly because I know a few like this. This is the man who chased traders from the temple. Well done.
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Tell it like it is. Not only a poet but an Artist too. I like your poem. Good luck in the contest.
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Reading this I know who's side I'm on. I clearly sympathize with your strong and eloquent stand against the sanctimonious moralists and ego boosters.
You bring the truth to the table and shame to the forked tongues of "Moral indignation".
Loved how powerful the first 2 stanzas are and how you come to rest in God's arms, your sanctuary.
Great take on the prompt, good luck in the contest.
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This was great. A strong, beautiful depiction of God's "though" love. He loves us so much, but we need to stay right with him.
I couple of the stanzas seemed like seperate pieces on their own - which isn't bad, it made for a kind of cool and unique flow.
Good take on this prompt, it is interesting and really tells of your thoughts and own personal feelings and your yearning for strength.
Beautiful artwork too.
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Yes, we have no control over the distorted views of others and can only trust in our own perceptions, as well.
very nice illustration, R.S. - always happy to see you adding your own art to your writings.
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Nice flow and rhyme scheme, and a good presentation of opposing viewpoints that leaves the reader to make up their own mind as to who is sanctimonious here.
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Your words reflect a strength of faith, belief in yourself and your convictions. They also present another side by what is followed by others. A very fitting message in response to the prompt, especially the closing verse, with reference to being the holiest and worthy of a halo.
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