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Ecstasy 1 (original)

My fingers touch your empty heart
Unspoken words of who thou art
Trembling pulses make me shiver
As down towards my soul they quiver

Don’t hurry now, relax and sigh
You know you need this more than I
Ecstasy will bring you pleasure
As our emotions rise together

I will fill those empty spaces
And take you to exotic places
Emotions will be soaring high
You and I will reach the sky

Tumbling softly to the ground
Then up again in feelings found
Ebbing from our secret places
While taking joy from our embraces

When all emotions have been sought
And both have all the pleasure caught
We lay us back and feel the peace
Oh! what wonder, what release

Now silently we lay and ponder
Feeling calm and feeling wonder
If only life could be this fine
And we could feel this all the time

Jenny Lloyd






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  • BluRosePoet8488
    June 16
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    A beautiful entry indeed. Thank you for entering and good luck! Keep the ink flowing!
    ~Donna~


  • Juggalette Sammy
    June 3

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    I did enjoy reading this poem. The rhyme, the flow, the imagery. It was an excellent read! Thank you so much for entering, and good luck.


  • tarcus
    May 19

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    I love the flow and the unforced rhyme, each stanza making you need to read the next for fear of missing something good.
    thanks for the entry


  • Trixie08
    April 29

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    Very nice. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

    -Please do not respond till AFTER the contest


  • Sunday Rain
    April 29
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    beautiful

    ^_^ beautiful write


  • Reanna Eryn
    April 6

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    This is so lovely. Nice flow, nice rhyme, nice everything. You're a much better writer than I. Keep on writing.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 16

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    This was a gorgeous write!
    Lovely flow, great rhyme
    & nicely portrayed sensual imagery.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 24

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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • alwaysapartofme
    January 16

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    this a little bit sexual and i do like but that is not what i want it be about. and it does show you already have a trophy for it. i am sorry it is a good poem though. if you have any questions send me a message.


  • alwaysapartofme
    January 16
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    very good. good luck in my contest.


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    January 9

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    Don’t hurry now, relax and sigh
    You know you need this more than I
    Ecstasy will bring you pleasure
    As our emotions rise together


    I think this stanza was rhymed well. It's also my favourite out of them all.
    Great write.
    Laura


  • DogFish silver member
    January 1
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    Sounds like you sorted out you problems with the moon!


  • LilEmoPrincess
    December 23, 2008
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    Broke a rule Allready has a trophie DQ


  • Plastic Dreams
    December 20, 2008

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    thank you for labeling this "original". it makes this much easier to consider when judging.

    as for this write i take it you went with the euphoric embrace perspective. and i love it. it pushes me to a much happier place than your two previous writes. it seems that this may be a bit more sexual than some of the previous ones i've come across but in subtle tones that weren't over zealous in exploiting what exactly was happening. this is definitely a finalist! thanks for the submission.

    pd


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    November 19, 2008
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    Thank you for your most beautifully sensual entry, Josie


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    what a beautiful piece you have penned
    I love this


  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    Love it x

    Thank you so much for your entry x This poem was such a joy to read, the sentiments expressed were lovely. Poetic grace at work xx

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