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My Oasis

 

Seeing it sparkle in the light,

reaching out to  touch it,

Watching as it slips away.

 

A golden, gold ribbon,

With a small locker on it,

Wanting to see the photo.

 

Who's smile would hide,

Inside this beauty thing,

That someone tossed away.

 

Stretch out all my lenght,

Seeing it fall into the dark,

No wait, a stony street.

 

I look around myself and see,

Seeing not the 21'th century,

But the old ball dresses.

 

So this is how it looks like,

Inside my peaceful mind,

A big ball and glittering things.

 

Wishing I could stay here,

Within myself in peace,

But then I open my eyes.

 

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  • roninwort
    December 11, 2008

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    Bravo

    The imagery is astounding! The words invoked images as i read them, it flowed together amazingly. i definately enjoyed reading this poemm!


  • daviscth silver member
    November 21, 2008

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    i love the imagery that reading this piece brings to mind. It's really pretty. Thanks so much for posting.