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Lost in the spring

 i

 

The moon races east
through pastures of clouds
flying west.

Rumbles from her past
trundle through her brain
as the frail lady fidgets
near the midnight hour.
She hears whispers in the wind
and the nurse, pert as a cat,
wheels her charge
into a darkened room.
The storm claps its agreement.
The nurse purrs, Into bed, Roseanne. 

 

 ii

 

Behind a curtained window
branches thrash and whip.
Stern, the voice of thunder
and she cowers,
hunched on a pillow,
views in the flash of mirror
pain of another time –

a slip of a girl
running late, beret bobbing,
climbing a darkened hill,
rain lashing her face.

 

iii


In a shaded hallway,

a drunken father squats
then pounces: To your room, Rosie!
He sprawls her on a bed.
She screams, Daddy, please …
daddy, don’t!


Rosie chews terror in her pillow
and, at some stage, his belt falls
limp, to the lino’ floor.
A door slams.

Alone, Rosie hears
the distant stroke of twelve
and wide-eyed, she whimpers ...
a small animal in shock.

         

iv

 

Roseanne curses black winds of night
and a half century’s grieving
on the road that went

nowhere in particular
leaving her, a tree sapped of juices
with one leaf clinging, still,
to a memory of spring ….

 

v

 

Perhaps a kind word,
a small gift …
quiet whispers lost

to wild gales of age 
and the moon pointedly

angles west
beyond her midnight hour.

Author notes

Prompt: A poem that paints sheer loneliness.

[I chose to write Modern or Free Verse.]

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Comments

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    A rich piece, the imagery is well done and there is a story behind the words - just the right amount of telling and showing.

    Thank you for your entry.


  • Guerrero
    November 18, 2008
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    wow...so emotional..so powerful.. alot of imagery..great job,nice peice


  • malmadre gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Heartbreaking memories! caught in your net of poetry. So compelling in imagery. I imagine our last memories will be the things that affected us the most, the painful possibly overriding the good stuff, "a small animal in shock" what a description for a hurt child. Those little ladies in nursing homes, that have lost their voices of protest, quietly suffering through memories of a past injustice. "The moon races east
    through pastures of clouds
    flying west and rumbles of the past
    trundle through her brain" This really affected me!


    • Lyndon gold member
      November 18, 2008
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      Thank you for reading this poem.

      It is wonderful when someone responds so positively in tune as you are. I do thank you ever so much.

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