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Chickadee:

I will always be honest, even if it hurts
I will not fight for you for you are not a possession but,
I will defend you with my life for you are the most precious part of my soul
I will never take you for granted, but when I screw up
I will always apologise
Your laughter heals my wounds
Your desire makes me feel beautiful
Enough of this froofy mush
Do ya wanna???
Love Me


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  • briareus gold member
    December 10, 2008

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    Promises and an invitation, warm and direct, explicit commitment to caring, reasons given, laughter and desire, last line concentrates message of offered love, of asking...

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 30, 2008

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    I like the fact that your first thought re the foundation is honesty, without it, there is nothing worth having to hold on to is there?

    Also like that you won't fight for them as they are not a possession, oh so true, as to the promise to defend, that's honourable.

    Liked the rejoinder that when you screw up you'll apologize, as human beings we can all unintentionally get something wrong but it's important to admit it and offer an explanation ( which is not the same thing as an excuse ) or the lie of the alibie lol


    Haven't heard the word froofy before, at first wondered if you may have meant frothy mush but froofy is kind of goofy sounding so I guess it means the same, froofy goofy mush, makes us turn to mush.

    Except when it's chocolate box and insincere, your love note is not chocolate box and sounds sincere, it is a much more nicer way of not reducing it to get you're coat, you've pulled, lol


    Congratulations on getting the green goblet


  • PoesyPeruser
    November 27, 2008
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    Simply beautiful, you make me cry.
    but of course...
    Poesy


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    Of course, they "wanna" ! How could they not after getting a note like this? Thank you so much for making
    me smile this morning. Love, Lane


  • birdlove
    November 19, 2008

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    This is a very sweet love letter, and I absolutely adore the title. It just makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside. Dunno why. Ha. Anyway, great write and good luck in the contest <3

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