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LIFE (the prefix)

A silent hush, straight pedal rush
bustin' gusts of coal
like a gold rush 
a gentle touch up against the roughest of the rough
you'd be surprised if i didn't talk 2 much
well, guess what
it was time for a change
history re-arranged
gained that level of respect
majority rules
i detect
only the worlds all a mess
confused balls of stress
rised to the TOP
to drop like it's weightless
no wait that don't make sense
more like fateless & hopeless
the inner spirit faded its dopeness
faceless like i lost my greatness
and i keep gettin' sick
from this up and down motion
i miss that love and devotion
only it comes in wierd doses
like drunk hypnosis
and then the sh*t just don't taste right
blechhh 
open minded and positive
thats the way i try to live  ...

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  • Laconic
    March 1
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    cool

    hey what's up hows it going with you

  • incomplete621
    January 30
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    nice

    very good fluid portrayal

  • Everse
    November 30, 2008

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    this is good, I like the way it moved. The ending was kind of lazy in my opinion. Definitely some unique metaphors in this piece though. Nice!


    • Leech
      November 30, 2008
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      yo, thanks for picking up the slack on the judging

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