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Even Lucifer dies

When you crawled on top of me
    that december night inside my room
I thought it was my end
I thought i would be inexistent

No word came out of me
    for fear of creating a chaos
    within the family

I never hinted on that evil 'thing'
    you've done
    for i don't want to stain my name
    to carry a stigma
    to be ostracized by everyone

So i locked it within
I pretended as if it never happened
    but there is one thing i can't deny:
    You are a DEMON
    No, you are LUCIFER

I thought my imprisonment from fear
    and anger would be for eternity
    but karma is working with me

One day, I heard a news:

You are dead
    with 70 stab wounds
    attacked inside a club
    by a stranger high in drugs

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  • xeroabyss II
    February 18

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    Sucks that tragedy occurs, but such are the lives of those who exist, right...
    Um, would you take it badly if iI told you that the very end of this made me laugh a bit?
    Im kind of a cynical, bitter person who is all about people needing to pay for what they have stolen (yeah, i'll be there at the end ofthe world helping kill us all off like i mentioned in your "Revenge" piece).
    Plus, it was just a twist ending that caught me off guard.
    -cheers


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    December 17, 2008

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    People that do these horrible, vile things to others eventually get what's coming to them and personally, such sickos in my humble opinion, deserve a very slow and painful death, for doing these kind of things to someone so vulnerable.


  • happy-lil-artemis
    December 10, 2008
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    good job and good luck


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 20, 2008

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    That is the best thing that could ever happen, Karma to come around and serve up justice to the one who did sucha brutal act...my rapist went to jail after molesting his 4 yr. old daughter...


    • sol-luna
      November 20, 2008
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      Being a victim is indeed very difficult as you are torn between fighting for your right as a person who's violated and maintaining peace in the family. it is such a sad truth that most perpetrators are those who are close to the victim.

      i'm happy though that karma came around.

      Thanks for the comment and for the HM.


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    very nice take on the prompt here i thought you did a very great excellent job penning your piece here good luck to you in th contest

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