I turned to you;
you looked away.
Bitter tears fell;
you shrugged them away.
You turned to leave
I followed you.
I needed to show
just how much I loved you.
You didn't see it so
you swung a punch.
I fell.
I curled into a small
little ball not to be seen.
Curled up in such a way
that I'd never be hurt.
Not again.
But that was a week ago.
Now I'm back in your arms
again.
Told you I loved you.
Author notes
Isn't that the way it sadly usually goes??
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A contest entry
- May I Prompt You? VII - Physical Abuse by Manda Kathryn.
500 points, ended November 22, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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I was really suprized by that ending. the structure change, I dont know if this is intended, magnified how odd the situation really is. Good job.
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Yes, i rather have a habbit of changing the structure at the end of my poems
Thank you for your comment though
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Wowzers!
The truth of this is so heartbreaking, I love how you have penned this ... in her thoughts and it almost seems as if shes trying to justify herself within it all
Excellent
♥
Thank You & Best of Luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Wow... such a true poem about odd relationships
You have women that are beaten like crazy, yet they hold onto those men and say they love them so .... I dont get it
You did a great job capturing this tho
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Aww. Yes this is the way it usually plays out. Loved it.
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This almost made me cry. Well written.
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Hmm.. I'm assuming this is not a real/life read, at least I hope so. Last time i checked you and Jake were still pretty solid. but that was before school ended. WHOOP WHOOP, one more exam then im done. tomorrow. so we can judge the contest as soon as then, when do you finish yours?
and good poem, reminded me of that song thats in bend it like beckham. and sadly that is the way it normally goes, be safe and enjoy your hols.
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Aunty
XoXo Claire-Anne XoXo
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ugh.. i hate abuse
hope this isnt true sweets -
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Nah don't worry, ish not ^^
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