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Daddy Please

yell and scream at me and call me names
i'll just sit and play fukcing games
not much else i can do
when all i have is everything to lose
hit me once and beat me twice
sorry daddy why cant we play nice
lay your hands on me again
then act like it never happened
thats okay and i can deal
with this pain i wont admit is real
see this blade and see this beer
watch me heal myself right here
i cant take all the words
all the names damn they hurt
slut and whore and bitch and fat
stupid and worthless lets not forget that
its okay i know youre right
but daddy please...not tonight

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  • SaviDropKick.Oi.
    November 18, 2008

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    Wow babyy....It was so good...I loved thr rhyme and emotion...just wow..I can really relate to this...brilliant job love...
    Love,
    Sav


  • shecantstopfalling.
    November 18, 2008

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    shit...the rhyme was good. Its a really neat poem

    thats okay and i can deal
    with this pain i wont admit is real
    see this blade and see this beer
    watch me heal myself right here

    thats awesome...I hope ur ok...