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a different room

Missing image
trembling your hand reaches
your eyes implore me to understand
you are in another room
with long lost friends and lovers
you are not afraid of dying

Author notes

my fathers eyes as he lay dying love and compassion for those left behind
photo mine

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  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    very touching

    you expressed a sad reality we all must face, and
    did it with a subtle beauty to it. good job on this lady.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    This is sad but it is such a beautiful piece that you have penned good luck to you in the contest best wishes always be well.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    this is sad

    but like the way you formed this to structure a nice piece of poetry, thank you for this entry, good luck
    Linda