It’s only in mythology that wishes all come true.
Tears and broken hearts aren’t in the tales they tell.
Her love had sailed away and was lost in the blue.
His words of love forever now held her like a cell.
In her dreams, his lips, his touch, increased her despair.
In her waking hours, she'd be reminded constantly,
by lovers holding hands or a fragrance in the air.
Her only solace could be found walking by the sea.
Gazing out amidst the sound of waves upon the beach
an image of a castle seemed to rise out of the mist.
Somehow she felt her lost love was within her reach,
a hope she couldn’t find the strength of will to resist.
As she stripped and entered, the water welcomed her
with a gentle touch upon her skin like a warm caress.
She saw her lover’s hands, transparent and a blur,
holding back the crashing waves and granting her access.
A whisper of his voice as she sank beneath the sea
told her, once again, of the promise he had made.
She felt again his strong hands, as she floated gently,
and she felt a joy forgotten. She was not afraid.
His lips met hers in tenderness, to his hands she did submit,
as she opened up her heart to the pleasures she had known.
His strong and vibrant body pressed against her, intimate,
and with her final breath she released a pleasured moan.
She felt him enter her, driving with desperate need,
as her own ecstasy drove all thoughts from her mind.
With a silent yell, she felt him release his seed,
and then the world turned dark as if she had gone blind.
A whispered noise came to her, a comfort shushing sound,
like her mother used to make when she was just a child.
It was the gentle sound of waves, as she lay on the ground,
upon a bed of seadrift. She remembered and she smiled.
She knew the beauty of true love, knew his promise, kept.
She knew the purity of passion given without sin.
His memory would live on. She bowed her head and wept,
not from sadness but for joy for his child that grew within.
Author notes
Hope that’s what you had in mind… It’s the story the picture whispered to me 
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: The Calling by Jim Warren
No line limit
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired Poems by ennovy.
700 points, ended November 21, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
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Brilliant rhyne and story!
You have outdone yourself. This is the strongest piece in the contest. May it do well in the contest!
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Wow, that has to be one of the most beautiful and passionate things I've read from you so far. It's definatley a favorite of mine now. I hopw all goes well and this is some of you're best word flow so far!
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Very Beautiful Write!
I really enjoyed this piece. It was beautiful from the first word to the last. This piece showed great flow and thought. Only criticle observation that I saw was second verse, second line:"In her waking hours, she would reminded be," This sounds a little forced to me.I do realize however this could be something of poetic licence but You might want to concider revising.Otherwise thats the only flaw I see in a flawless piece
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"In her waking hours, she'd be reminded constantly," Thanks for the tip
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You got me
stretching for a rhyme... It's archaic wording... still playing with it and will try to see what I can come up with Thank you for the read, kind words, and applause... I always appreciate great comments... yours are appreciated.
Ken
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Beauty~
Oh My Word~ You have penned a Beauty of a verse which caresses the Heart but also stimulates the Mind to envision sweet images~
with a sensual taste to bring about a smile
Wonderful weaving of rhyme~ Loved the story You told with energy fluent- cohesive and leaving much to behold
Jim Warren one of my fav artists-
Thank You for sharing his Light~ touches
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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This is such a beautiful story that you have
told here my friend. I love the imagery and
the rhyme scheme in this. Wonderful work
bringing this picture to life through your
words. All the best to you with this piece
in the contest!
Jeremy0826
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What a wonderful story you came up with for the picture.
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Ohhhhhoooo...
wellnow.
I shoulda known. . .lol, can't let anything slip past me. . .
Okay, wasn't ready for this one, but maybe I should have seen the little adult tage in there.
Alrighty then, sir. . .thanks sooo much for this one, it's wonderful.
Love,
Jin
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This is a beautiful story that you have penned from that picture. It's very creative.
These lines though, do not ring true:
"It’s only in mythology that wishes all come true.
Tears and broken hearts aren’t in the tales they tell."
Only because there are tons of myths that are about broken hearts and definitely do not have happy endings.
But if you do not mind, then neither do I, because you still have penned a wonderful story here. Best wishes in the contest you have entered
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Good point Artistic license? Mad Cow? I'm sure there's some reason for it Thanks for a great comment and taking the time to read...
Ken -
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It was my pleasure, I am very glad that I read it
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A beautiful story you have unfolded here from the pic prompt.
I enjoyed the read...well done.
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Very NICE !
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A very beautifully penned piece.I lovem your story and yountold it so tenderly.
All the best in the contest
Gaylene
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Truly lovely fantasy.
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Absolutly beautiful adult fairy tale of the lady of the sea.....the love, loss, sadness....left with a bundle of joy within....Thank you for entering our contest...Novy & Brazos
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this poem is absolutely beautiful. you did a fine job with this prompt, this brought a smile to me.. I really enjoyed reading. the imagery is wonderful.
good luck
kat
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