a little poof of smoke springs up
snatching moisture from my tongue
wrinkling my nose I fend off the dry suffocation
sweat beads and trails down my brow
teasing me with thoughts of summer days
spent splashing in the lake
the blisters on my palm stings as the skin splits
sweat and grit grind deeper into the sensitive creases
the callus on my thumb peels and cracks
I glance up
still no relief
the sun lingers
the ground is parched
lack of rain will do that to dirt
nothing grows
no roots to impede my digging
unfortunately
HA, if only I had had to dig post holes here
My lower back aches from this bent work
my shoulders protest the constant push and heave
bare feet send jolts of pain with every move
another glance at the sun
not a cloud to help protect
my burning shoulders and back
I deserve each salty burn of sweat on naked skin
every agonizing moment of suffocating dryness
regret is too late
the collar on my neck bites deep
the prongs strike my nerves
gasping I fall to my knees
'hurry up' a slight voice yawns
I glance up and see her
she used to be such a small child
but she grew up
I should have thought about that before...
Author notes
not rhyming I know, but I didnt know if it was mandatory.
A contest entry
- Digging your own grave by raven-ink.
900 points, ended November 24, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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i liked it more as free verse..it came out from the soul more.
so hard to make rhyming shit do that... requires too much thinking to force words to match...
i liked many images - they were real and vivid.
hope you are doing well

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amazing imagery! I could see and feel everything! My only complaint is that you did not rhyme. But other than that it met all my criteria.
thank you


