So has your life disappeared?
You’ll never know, if you ever see.
Break away and meet your fear,
The time is here,
Can you hear the clock? It never stops!
It’s ticking clear.
And if your life is no longer free ,
You should be really carefully.
Take your time and be sincere,
You can't escape your place on Earth,
So make the best for your own worth..
If you ever break apart,
Hold your loved ones close to your heart,
Cuz they can help to fight the fear,
And stand besides you while you heal...
A contest entry
- What Are You Feeling? by Simone Brooklyn.
1050 points, ended November 25, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I like this! It is very well written. There is one thing that can be improved, and that is writing 'Because', or maybe 'Cos' ' instead of 'Cuz'. The poem itself is very good.
On your profile, it says that you would like to know what people think of your writing. In my opinion, you are a very talented writer, and I hope you know that!
Brillinat Job and Keep Writing!
-Crystal
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I really love the message you are sending in this poem. The only thing I would change about it is the spelling of "cuz" in the last line. Good luck in my contest. =]
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