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From Pastel To Indigo




The sky awakes
opaque landscape;

ever-changing visionary

in vast display
clouds form and break.

Fog swept memories
creep,
emerge

pass trees and stones
stationary sentinels
guarding primal urge.

Blues - promise love everlasting;

rains - wash away
sedentary remains of thunderheads
rising out of the wreckage
sewn of seeds. 

Windswept chances
salvatory;

needs and deeds,
the many
tear stained pleads

ask rainbows
to cradle the sun
with hopes revolutionary -

sweet dreams
where blossoms
have begun.

Silence

always lingers
through dawn,

moments for the visionary –
the sky to see the sky redrawn.















Author notes

Written to a rhyme scheme of:
Abacbcdbdebefbfgbg
separated by an eight syllable meter count,
free form line breaks and alliteration.


Prompt:

A self portrait – The metamorphoses

Idle Mind Wondering

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    December 10, 2008

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    The idea of self-portrait drew some lovely poetry that shows depth of thought. You have avoided the cliche of "rainbow poetry" by infusing this work with original imagery. Your hopeful spirit shines in every line. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz


  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 30, 2008

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    I feel the rhyme scheme offers reflection in its tone and count. I love the way blue signifies love and of course, the sky and how it is given significance throughout, solidifying the whole
    of the write. Blue


  • malmadre gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Such reflection and solitude flowing throughout, unearthly imagery. I am near speechless...one of your best!


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      November 18, 2008
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      thank you very much. this one took some time and thought to put together; I very rarely write about myself even though much of my work seems personnel.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 17, 2008

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    ...the sky to see the sky redrawn.

    You have captured such beauty in this verse and I love what you did with the rhyme scheme. No sing song rhyme in this brilliantly executed work.

    Spectacular use of background image as well. A rainbow is absolutely perfect.

    Unique, creative, and a pleasure to read and enjoy. Well done. ~Pamela

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