I don't know how to show you
that I am falling.
Falling quick and fast,
even though I know the convictions of the past.
You think I'm not inerested
in you an everything you are.
We fit like a jigsaw,
but hopes and expectations seem so very far.
There is a fire deep whithin the pair of us,
week's and month's may pass,
you can deepend on my trust.
Trust is something given,
not just something to earn.
You have it now and forever,
just don't let me burn.
We are so very similar, but so very different.
The look that's in your eyes seems so familiar.
I feel so safe and small,
when you hold me so close,
I just can't stop the fall!
We fit like a jigsaw in every single way,
you know exactly what to do
I don't ever have to say.
Your like another peice of me,
a peice I can't keep safe.
Together we are safe here in this place,
soon to face the storm,
the thunder of dissaproval,
But until then Im happy,
hold me close.
Just let me fall
A contest entry
- The Feelings you get by ChaingangAngel.
400 points, ended November 29, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me write again!!! by Mykeee.
2000 points, ended December 1, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
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the feel of this was real good but the rhythm of it was a little off but it hit many great points of emotions that i enjoyed. not sure what poem U compared it to. thanks for entering
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thank you so much for my honerable winner it means alot thankyou x :-) x
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This was really good I enjoyed reading this write! Thanks for entering
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the words are fantastic. very touching and very true, but something about it just doesnt flow. It has an effect anyways : to be somewhat disjointed, it kinda goes with what you are saying too. maybe Im reading it wrong! ?
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bout Just let me fall
yeah you are right, it doesnt flow, but i cant think how to put it another way, my meaning needs to stay but i just cant think how eles to write it, do u have any advise? its about me n this guy n how we stay inside together, because people wont be happy that we are together, i cant keep him safe from the dissaproval thrown at him, but im fallin for him! lol tell me if u think there is a better way of putting it, this poem means alot to me n i want it to be perfect xxxxx :-) thank you for the comment x
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