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Raindrops

Falling raindrops are like "teardrop-shaped
heavy enough to fall on the ground
accompanied by thunderstorms escaped
as the thunder hits downpour increases sound

rainy days and getting cold out there
Love to watch as the rain fall
window pane makes sound  a blare
lets stay inside to keep us warm

As the rainbow comes out
at the end of a rainy days
a promising sunshine all about
to keeps us warm with his rays


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marilyn monroe

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  • JinSays gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Love to watch as the rain fall
    window pane makes sound a blare
    lets stay inside to keep us warm
    Love this feeling you've captured here. I think you've done a great entry here, for this prompt, and I wish you all the best,
    Love,
    Jin

  • NoMoreAThought
    November 17, 2008

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    Very wonderful piece. My mind is muddled right now. But I can just picture myself with someone just looking out to the rain. Holding each other close. Very beautiful. Awesome write.