Once such a dull life,now radiates and glows a golden hue
Two hearts filled with a love so true
I close my eyes and think of you
I watch as you paint fresh colours over my old life and,
I see you painting storm clouds blue
And over the horizon ,brush strokes make a bright and magnificent view
My life decorated so shiny and brand new
You are my everything , my love I want to thank you
for painting my grey sky a sunshine filled, cloud free ,bright blue
Author notes
Painting Storm Clouds Blue (16)
A contest entry
- PIF Lucky Dip by catalyst..
650 points, ended December 1, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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I LOVE this title. So intriguing! Wonderfully written poem too. =) It shows an honest love I think...
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I like the open words and honesty here, to tell someone something...and rhyme does not hide feelings, it brings them to a sharper focus...very well done...PK
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I really loved the last line
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This is beautiful. First of all, I have to start off by saying that I love the rhyming scheme. I don't know if this is form poetry or not, but I really found that pleasing. It gives a light and playful tone to this poem, and that's nice to see. I don't know if this was a title prompt or not, but judging by your author notes, I think it was. Oh well, I still have to say I like the title.
I also like the symbolism of clouds and things of the sky. It works out well and fills the poem with lovely imagery. Good luck in your contest. I think you will do well with this piece.
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