I wish you were here, my love, because
your everything i ever wanted, everything
i ever needed, the way you smile, your glow...
Your elegant eyes warms my soul, the loving
kindness you enhance, making me whole, being
free into a brighter life away from seeing the
downfalls i always obtain, as when i never met
you, when i had nothing to gain. When i met you
my heart saw a new type of life, a new perspective
of how i start each day, the true colors of the world
can change this way. Its true, that when you fall in
love and see a new reason to live, like i did, the blossoms
seem to bloom brighter then a new season, the light
contains more glitter then ever before, the darkness of
my heart has gone and i have a different sight on things.
I love the way your hair sways around in the wind, the
way your mouth smiles at me like i was there, even when i'm
not i can sense your smile, your so kind and i love you so,
that's why i am writing this poem just so you can know,
i love you, i wish you were here,
without fear, i can never shed a single tear.
Author notes
This is the first love poem i've write, and this is in a persona!
A contest entry
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Comments
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im not removing this because i like it but i was looking for rhyming... seeing as this is a very heartfelt piece i must keep it and judge with the rest..... this was a beautiful poem by the way and very touching
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Very Nicely Done
Thank you and good luck -
This was a very lovely poem. I loved the language you used and thought it was very powerful. It has a lovely flow.
'I love the way your hair sways around in the wind, the
way your mouth smiles at me like i was there, even when i'm
not i can sense your smile, your so kind and i love you so'
This part of the poem was very nicly described.
Very well done and good luck in the contest. -
This is very nice. For your first love poem, it definitely is beautiful. I'm not a big person on rhyming, but the way you incorporated your rhyming schemes into the poem makes it flow nicely.
The idea is sad, yet it is very lovely. It is hard to be far away from the person you love, and I believe this addresses the ideas well.
Nice write.
I hope to read some more of yours soon =]
-Kat
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