Listen to the muffled sound of my heartbeat,
The sound of a prisoner breaking free,
Thud...
Thud...
Don't just hear me: listen.
Feel the touch of my ghost, and want it.
I beg of you to remember our nights. Only Ours.
Need me, like I never needed myself.
Can it really be dying? Will it cease to exist?
For it is soon to be the last thing keeping you inside.
The last lingering kiss that scarred my soul.
Relive the brush of my lips over your neck,
Turn back the year that has fought by.
Would you do it again, if you knew it would end up like this?
The most Heavenly Sin is what we shared...
And now all that's left of me is the wind that strokes your hair,
A memory that you'll never love again.
Will tears ever fall, that don't echo your words?
Telling me that you loved me. Telling me that you needed me.
Unspoken promises, that we'd last beyond death.
Falling for you was falling from the greatest height,
You were the hands that guided me down; you caught me
But only once. The final time left me shattered.
But now i feel the chains cut through, yet releasing me as i'm torn.
I feel my dreams take hold of me...
Protecting me through the night.
Alas, my eyes...so empty now, can't see you in my arms,
I'm blinded by the numbing pain,
As what joins our souls is severed so, so slowly.
A wish, A word; Left to rest on your tongue.
For i am nothing more than a whisper.
Don't look behind you...I won't be there.
Listen, as the beating of my heart is replaced with silence.
Author notes
Contest: Midnight-x-Rose = option 2 
-the inspiration came before the prompt as this was written a few months ago, but as much as 'love' and 'heartache' and stuff seems to a lot of people quite trivial these days, to me it kinda fits the prompt? =]]]
Looking for something contest (i think its called? =]) - Option 1- Dark valentines
XPatchwork-HeartX
Just-Not-Meant-To-Be : 2b Slipknot- Snuff
I've not written a poem for a while, but i've finally had some inspiration. oh joy lol.
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Comments
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I like this poem...it was interesting...
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Awww this makes me feel so sad, I can relate to it and am really sorry you know how this feels, as I wouldn't wish these feelings on anyone. Always here if you need to talk to me I'm here.
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aww
this is quite sad but very good,its beautifully written and i loved every line
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thanks for entering!!!!
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oh dear
these words are spoken with so much pain.. you have no idea how much this rings true to me for i am going through this so very much so right now.. i need your option please in your authors notes.. i find myself wanting to scream out loud at night now a days for the pain wont subside.. excellent work, thank you for entering the contest.. best of luck. -
Thanks for entering this great write
and goodluck.
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Thank you for your entry and good luck
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Thanks for entering.
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love is quite confusing is it not? thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Ok, that's an incredible write.
I'm loving the first stanza here.,...it's pharsed so well!
And tehre were some amazing lines in the rest of the poem.
Keep writing, you';re very talented. (and I can't type"!) -
beautifully depressing
a monument to epic break-ups.
well written....thank you for your entry! -
Beautiful.
Which option did you use? -
Woaw this is beautiful it did match the criteria perfectally. amasingly written! Thankyou so much for entering
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Aw this was absolutely, positively, heart wrenching unbearably sad, nuff said...good luck.
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please put your optin in your an thankyou!
this is a terrific write and i am glad we added you to the finals list! -
WOW, really powerful write here, and it flows really smoothly. The start of it draws you right in, and never in it's length does it become the least bit tiresome. I'm adding you to the finalists list, thank you so much for this excellent entry!!!!
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beautiful heartache. I loved this write it was so powerful. keep up the great work. i wish you the best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering this piece. i really liked the lines:
"Alas, my eyes...so empty now, can't see you in my arms,
I'm blinded by the numbing pain,
As what joins our souls is severed so, so slowly.
A wish, A word; Left to rest on your tongue.
For i am nothing more than a whisper.
Don't look behind you...I won't be there.
Listen, as the beating of my heart is replaced with silence."
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Holy Moly! What a read this one is! The feelings in this one just tugs at one's heartstrings, and leaves one 
You did a great job on this one! OMG!!!
Best of luck in this contest!
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Wow!! This is probably one of my favorites I've read in my contest so far! I can relate to this poem so well! It's like you totally know me or something.. Creepy..
*Listen to the muffled sound of my heartbeat,
The sound of a prisoner breaking free,
Thud...
Thud...
Don't just hear me: listen.*
I was captured by the first stanza, this is AMAZING! So beautiful and so dark.. I love it..
*I beg of you to remember our nights. Only Ours.
Need me, like I never needed myself.*
I wished for this so many nights... This was the only thing I wanted him to remember.. So beautiful, good job.
*Turn back the year that has fought by.
Would you do it again, if you knew it would end up like this?*
This ultimate question.. This is absolutely amazing.. And I have still yet to find an answer.. Amazing..
I think I'm just going to stop here, before I post the whole damn poem in this pox, lol. GREAT job, and thanks for entering. I have a good feeling that you will probably get a trophy, a really good feeling. Thanks for showing me this, welcome to the finalist <3
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