The road has been long and tiring
the sun wasn't always there
and it hasn't always been easy,
But, I'm almost home now.
Sometimes it would rain on me,
and wash the mountain side out,
making it near impossible to climb up and out.
Sometimes the wind would blow,
knocking me down,
leaving nothing for me to grab
hold of, nothig to pull me up.
But I'm almost home now,
almost home where I can see
the sunshine and feels it's warmth
wrapping around me.
I can see home on the horizon,
where I know I will be safe,
where I will find you
waiting for me.
And I'm almost home now,
reaching out, just take my hand,
and lead the way,
to a simple time,
to a warm welcome,
Yes, I'm almost home now,
I don't know what I am going to find
when I get there,
but I'm almost home now
almost home...
Author notes
Just some thoughts that I had... Just don't ask me no questions...
Please tell me what you think
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Brilliant
There are no questions to be asked but only verdict to give - brilliant thoughts woven together to create a masterpiece....
heart where will beat
mind where will find peace
the smiles await ahead
love stands welcoming
under the crimson light
warmth you will find
under the blanket of moonlight
where tranquility will be by your side
let your heart wander
let your mind be at ease
open your doors of desires
open the windows of hope
let faith guide your path
let last hurdle be crossed
walk few more strides
take another leap forward
..and you'll be home soon
where you'll be free
Take care hun
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Thanks Minoo, Was gonna make this into a song, but I don't know... It does reflect a lot of personal feelings though.
Glad you enjoyed it!
and love
Nyetta
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Excellent
Very well expressed. such a well written and powerful write. Best of luck in the contest.
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Oy!!
OMG this swells the eyes and how did I miss this one
The last line tugged at the Heartstrings~
You brought much emotion into this piece-
Heck You do with all Your pieces though
Love it!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Oh honey
My heart so goes out to you and if you need to talk Im here so often there are things we need to say outloud to find our way Love Patty
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Oh Nettie this is beautifully done. You haven't lost your spark one bit. Great work Sis!
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Thanks Sis! if only I were that close to being home.....*sigh*
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OH wow
i can see that you really love him i am so sorry wow your poem is touching and i can feel your agony of losing him... he will be waiting for you smiling and reaching for him you just wait i am sure of it I LOVE YOU
LOVE
angie -
I promise not to ask you no questions, nosiree! This seemed to me for some reason terribly sad (very well done, yes, but so poignant) fine, indeed, very, very fine!!
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I felt that the phrase "almost home" was repeated too often. I know that you wanted to portray it as like...the big thing on the person's mind, but it's a little over done. And one note, I don't know if you meant to or not, but there's a little bit of rhyme in there that's not really in a scheme, it's just thrown in. It kinda disrupts the flow...and in your second stanza, there are only three lines, where there are normally four. Just in case you didn't know that, I told you. So yeah, you said no questions, but I'm kinda wondering where they are, that they want to come home so badly. Are they in the war, or returning from a business trip. Idk. It would be more interesting if it was more descriptive, although it is just your thoughts. I've had poems like that too. They don't need to be perfect, but you feel like you have to write them down. lol. So I understand, and now I feel like I've commented too much and I feel mean, so sorry if I offended you. Just trying to be constructive.
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First of all, Never feel bad about leaving a comment on anything I write. and the story behind this, is just this, I lost someone very near and dear to my heart, and that person is waiting for me in heaven, they are home, and I am still here, doing what I must till I join that one in heaven above... I am Almost Home, just not there yet...
And this is more of lyrics than just a read. May change and edit later, not sure yet.
Nyetta
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you really gave me things to think about, as i still have six months here in iraq. i can really look forward to being almost home
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What a lovely thought for you... Almost Home.
I will keep you and yours in my thoughts and prayers that you return home safely. Keep that chin up... Almost Home is just around the corner!
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very moving
a very moving and heartfelt piece. you really let us understand your journey. and tell us that everything in life eventually leads us back homd. and if we don't have one our search and journey will bring us to a place we can call home. i really love this piece and thank you for sharing.
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Thi is an aweome poem. I loved the way you decribed everything you had to get through to get almost home. I enjoyed the read!!
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I love the deep personal feelings and the way you let the reader fee them. This piece causes food for thought and keeps the reader's interest.
Love,
Amera♥
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