Perhaps the stars stopped shining
when I looked into your eyes.
Maybe god decided
their life was over.
But I think,
perhaps it is your beauty,
that outshines life itself.
Author notes
Thirty words or less, prompt - perhaps
A contest entry
- perhaps by going nowhere.
1400 points, ended November 18, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sweet
To find starlight in another soul, this is important. -
Very sweet. Finding something meaningful and beautiful in the other.
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i cabnt read as i am very drunlk at the time bit i can say hello
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Nice job!
Beautiful is how I can describe the writing on this Sara Jane. Thanks a lot for conveying your feelings.
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this is like the other person was loving themselves more, awwww. Poignant.
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Wow, Jan, this is so beautiful, and sad too, lovely poem my friend,
hope yer well and still off the fags,
Alex, snoggles ya.
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ooopsie, i always thought a mugwump was one of my mothers made up words! seems it isnt! snoggles with gropes i think then!!! xxx
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Ty Alex honey, glad you like. Am just peachy ty, hmmmm, the fag thing... i got some sucky sweety things from the dox, though ive not opened them yet.
Hope you and the family is well, i got another bairn on the way, a grand-daughter this time!
Snoggles with mugwumps xxx
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Brief and potent. Isn't this the desire of so many, to see someone like this? Beautiful write.
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Wonderfully written in it's splendid brevity.
Very good, well done poet.
Best of wishes to you alway's
Tony
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this is beautiful.... well done..
Grey
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just gorgeous.
Well done to you
Juls
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beautiful... to be told that or to think that about someone is incredible... very nice. thank you
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another gifted entry! this contest is really heating up. This poem is utterly fab! best of luck!
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How pretty this is, such lovely words that I think if they were spoken to me would make me smile for the rest of the day. C
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one of the most intense reflections of all is our light shining in a mirror. wonderfully stated...
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good
you saw a lot of colorful, lovely images your poem , I love how it is stated this and this ended well outstanding piece keep up the good work, excellent piece. There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write
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