Creation’s carousel of souls
whirled together in chaos,
one blending into the other
attached by unseen forces,
but all part of the whole
in life’s madness
One breaks, they all collapse
into pieces needing repaired,
before the ride into eternity
can continue.
Author notes
60 words or less
Photo is your prompt/inspiration
Photo Credit - Danny
just thoughts.....
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by AliceinPoetryLand.
1200 points, ended November 17, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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That entire first stanza was a dooozy!!!
The whole poem was good but I loved that first stanza!
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Thank you so much 'Swan song' - I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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There is an insanity or "madness" to life. I like the thought of us all being so connected that what affects one, affects all. Congratulations on carrying away a trophy
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Thank you 'JustJane' for reading and your lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
We are all connected, and one person can affect all - think of history.... madmen or saints - they all left their thumbprints on us....
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Great spiritual take on the picture. Wonderful imagery and a pleasure to read this morning. You take care. Sandy
Congratulations on the Bronze
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Thank you so much 'Sandygram' for your lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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thumbs up
the world crumbles, and then, yea, i really like this ons
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Thank you so much 'Draig aine' for your lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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This is a really powerful poem, that portrays an amazing thought. It seems like all of the world is clumping into one thing and there is no room left for an individual. One day they will see that no one ever accomplishes anything by following the crowd, since the crowd always falls. I think this is a great poem, congratulations on the bronze.
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Thank you so much 'Hope Angel' for such a lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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Excellent Creation in its own Write!
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Thank you so much 'Noah....' - glad you enjoyed.
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I like this poem a lot. It made me think of how when you look at the world, everything moves in time. Like traffice. And when an accident occurs, it interrupts the normal flow of events. Kudos.
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Thank you so much "Anelica Q' for stopping in - and your lovely comment.
Yes, I'm glad you saw that thought, too - I think it whirled by most...lol....but when 'break-downs' occur, it does disrupt the normal flows.
Glad you enjoyed.
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WOW.. this one is outstanding.. I've never thought of a carousel in this way before. You've done a fabulous job on this... I love the first two lines the best. me.. I normally I must confess can't handle riding carousel, the circular motion makes me a bit nauseous. but I do so like your take much much better
Congratulations on the Bronze Trophy..
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thanks kat - glad you liked this.
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Very strong free verse for this image prompt. Well done. Congratulations on your trophy. ~Pamela
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Thank you so much 'Pamela' for your lovely comment. I am pleased you liked this.
best wishes
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An amazing take on the picture. I love where you took this! Thanks so much for your entry
Gaylene
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Thank you so much 'Gaylene' - I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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Sometimes this is how I feel about life in general.. that we're on a carousel and at times it blends us ll.. at times we go flying off! Well done
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Thank you kiwi - glad you liked this.
Yeah, I feel that way, too - flying off is no fun, but neither is being 'broken'....lolol
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Wow I love the first Stanza
The middle two lines are my favorite good luck in her contest best wishes always
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Thank you Starz - glad you enjoyed...(only the lst stanza?....lol...maybe I should edit)
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Good work on this one aboomer! Good prompt and expression in this. I liked what I read in this!
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Thank you 'Patpowers....' - glad you enjoyed this.
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This is an awesome poem. I would never have thought of a theme like this for that pic. I enjoyed the read!!
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Thank you 'DavidTennantRocks' - glad you enjoyed this.
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