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Tears stream down her face
  the curves and flips
  hills and valleys
engulfed in a pinkish tint
nails painted bright red
tears streaming down her face

Breasts hanging triumphantly
down below, flushed and rounded
reflected..
jagged crimson streaks below
  on a rotund house
sharp brown almonds up above
and rabid wisps of chocolate silk...
tears streaming down her face

Supple skin covered in bumps
  in some places, so raw
a raunchy pair, smooth as porcelain
a perfect fantasy complimented
with luscious, time-ticking hips...
wipe the tears from her face.

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  • AAA Taurus The Bull gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    good

    a little Cryptic, , But I enjoyed most of what I read. it had a good feeling the words flowed well together. and made a point. that's always good.
    There was no error. No typos. Nothing to change. I look forward to your next write