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The Decider

I stalk the lonely night alone and without others, secluded and in isolation –
I call myself a Decider.

I wear the blackest clothes of darkness, the color of the night and the eternal abyss –
I call myself a Decider.

I carry a blade of steel, the sharpest knife, a sword of melancholy –
I call myself a Decider.

When thee hast thou in thy own Sin’s encountered,
I will be there to Decide.
If thine will’st in thy World thoroughly flatter,
I will be there to Decide.

I rape and pillage those who hold Lust in their hearts,
I feed the Glutton until his stomach may burst.
I give everything which is not desired to the one with Greed,
I condemn the Sloth to a lifetime of incessant ennui.
I beat and ravage the one charged with Wrath,
I force the one with Envy to destroy all they hold dear.
And for the one with Pride in his heart,
I condemn to the deepest depths of Hell for all eternity.

Blade in hand and strength in heart,
I will soon Decide the world and it’s fate,
The carefully constructed balance
Between Virture and Hate.

Author notes

This was inspired by option...
7, Write about keeping the balance between Sins and Virtues...

This poem and the concept of a "Decider" has a whole lot of backstory. It's actually a joke between me and my friends, which no one will probably understand or find funny. But yeah, it became a poem.

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  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    an In-Joke poem....Bizarre...!

    Yes, read this aloud to yourself...(perhaps after a drink, if you will...)
    When thee hast thou in thy own Sin’s encountered,

    I gotta be honest, some of it sounds kinda pompous...
    But if you translate it...It becomes a real piece of work. I have no idea of you meant the style to be comical, of if your intention was to sound like a shakespeare novel (am aware right now of offending you- not intended to harm...)
    but yes, for sound- it sounded good, for words...? I'm not sure that too many people will understand it.

    I am however, loving what you did with each of the sins and their punishments.
    Having read twice, it becomes something worth reading, and I thank you for entering.


    • seclusion
      November 23, 2008

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      Thanks for your review.

      Yes, I didn't actually mean for that part to be serious. It supposed to just sound crazy, like a person trying extra hard to be Shakesperian but failing. I thought it sounded kind of cool so I left it there. I don't really know why I put it there at all, but after I did it I thought it brought a little humor to the seriousness.

      Hopefully that clears it up. Thanks again!