If these walls could talk,
They would say they share
In my constant despair.
And stand alone.
If this couch could speak,
It would express similar hopes
In finding ways to cope.
So I sit alone.
If these windows could confide,
They'd let on identical feelings
On wounds that are never healing.
And so I am alone.
A contest entry
- A Sense of Place by Nicada.
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wow.
excellent write.
thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest,
good luck -
you did such a wonderful job of putting the pain in the poem and making it easy to see. i loved it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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This is so very sad, but it shares the pain of the writer very well. Nice job on this poem, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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this is a very sad write but very good, i really like your style.
the feeling of being alone can be a very dark one, i hope this is not one that you feel.x x
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Another masterpiece.
Great work on this work. It really worked. It is still working.
Your format is real cleverly placed.
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not at all what I expected. I was thinking it would be about amorous trysts that had been done on the couch ... goes to show about pre-judging
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I hear you
When my husband and I were having trouble years ago I did the same as you locked myself away for the doll within felt broken and blue .Nothing anyone would say would take away such blues .Then one day I was looking out of a winndow pane and I saw my reflection tears running down and as I looked into those eyes I heard within my mind why are you doing this to me . At first I thought it was meant why was my husband doing this to me and then I thought back no it ws why are you doing this to me and I was stunned for a moment .It was true I was closing myself away from the world and treating others about me just as My husband was treating me and I knew it was wrong for I am a very loving person . So I got myself dressed and took myself out and greeted the world and knew from that moment on that no one will change the real me by hurting me this way . I changed my place of living and I knew if it was meant to be he will find me and you know he did we have been married now for 29 years you see dont lock yourself away and make the person you have always been miserable because of anothers actions toward you . You stay you and be joyous and you will find each time as you see your reflexction you have taken care of the most important person in your life YOU FIRST
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no one is ever alone... all you need to do is look at this page to see that... we are all here to talk to, anytime,
hugs,
georgie,
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Though you feel so,
you are not alone; you're never alone. -
I liked this. Loved how creative this was!
I really enojoyed reading this.
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but are we ever really alone.. "they" always say there is someone out there for us.. one who knows us and understands us.. so are we ever really alone? by the way great peice
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