illuminated
arc of man's desire
travels in space
reflections lie
beauty remains briefly
Endeavor continues
reaching for more
we explore space
inspiring achievements
Author notes
prompt:
Endeavor photo by K. Kolczynski
non-traditional haiku chain
A contest entry
- Endeavor - photo prompt by thelordreigns.
550 points, ended December 13, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautifully done haiku chain.
Thanks so much for your entry and all my wishes for a blessed season of family, friends, and abundant life!
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Beautiful and evocative. The form is very oriental in flow. Super wordcraft!
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To Forge Ahead
Indeed, achievement encourages us to move ahead to the next endeavor, hopefully to yet another achievement: in this case, the exploration of the universe, "to go where no one has gone before."
Without endeavor, there never would be achievement. . . or failure, for that matter. And, even failure can lead to achievement.
Very well done; albeit, when a poem is without punctuation, each line should begin with a capital letter. The only other thing I would point out is that haikus always are about nature; so, in this case, I believe you have a "senyru chain."
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ
(former publisher's editor and published author)
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thanks . . since it is non-traditional I just put it as a non-traditional haiku chain . . the caps I don't like and don't use except for once in a while . . I think the lower case look suits a haiku or a senyru . . appreciate the read !!
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