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The Trial

She rode the breath of wind on stygian steed
and prowled our streets decanting dreams of men.
She drank unholy thoughts of lust and greed
ignoring canons set by holy pen.

She fooled us all with beauty charm and grace,
this harlot has defiled the Holy Church.
We bring her here before you in disgrace,
we snatched her from the devil in our search.

Your Eminence, we beg you ring the bell
and snuff the candle as you close the book.
We ask that you condemn this whore to hell,
the saints have turned their face and dare not look.

We mourn the souls this harlot has acquired
and bastards from her womb that men have sired.

 

 

 

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Prompt: The bell, book and candle; excommunication from the Roman Catholic Church.

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    December 14, 2008
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    This is a beautifully written sonnet that tells a powerful story. I thought the ironic tone was subtle and thoughtful, particularly the concluding couplet letting the world know that this woman did not sin alone. History has always blamed the "whore" and absolved the "john". Congratulations on your gold trophy. Peace, Liz


  • Tirrell
    December 14, 2008
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    This is exceptional! The more I read it the more I love it, am bookmarking.


  • masterblaster gold member
    December 14, 2008

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    Hi, I did not have to look to see who wrote this, beautiful sonnet ,great feel, great story line, you set the bar very high , Di


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    December 11, 2008
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    Exellent! Great story told in exellent sonnet form!
    Pam


  • celticwarrior
    December 11, 2008

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    You have a gift for the sonnet. Congratulations. A small quibble -- don't you mean to use the word "canon" as in guiding priciples versus "cannon" as in artillery?


    • Amera gold member
      December 11, 2008
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      Oh! Thank you! I didn't even realize the two words were spelled differently.


  • BehindTheShadow
    November 23, 2008

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    A great sonnet, but from what I hear you are one of the best on the sight. Love the title, and the story, best wishes.

    • Amera gold member
      November 23, 2008
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      aww... that's so sweet; thank you


  • Swan song gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Dear when you decide to condemn someone
    you do it like no other and if I am ever to be condemened will you please do my the honor?


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 20, 2008

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    WOW

    my sweet Form Queen you have master yet another and it is an awesome read indeed...i remember the story and the sadness that lay within but for man to condemn the woman harlot for which he himself has lied with, is more wicked that her lonely sin...excellent sweet-one and winner wrote all over it


  • chilali
    November 18, 2008

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    Such a beautiful sonnet! Wow. Amazing. I loved everything about this. And I do mean it when I say everything. You are a very talented writer. Wonderful work. I can't wait to read more


  • Wandika gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    Such a wonderous sonnet

    and take on prompt I did just read. I am forever a fan of your my Lady.

    Jim


  • Victory Gin silver member
    November 18, 2008

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    Its a sad fact that some believe a saint would turn their back on anyone much less a person who perhaps needs intercession more than anyone! Fantastic commentary... A subject that worked really well with the English form.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Wow, Amera...this is an impeccable Sonnet!
    You are the master my dear.

    All the best,
    mj.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Excellent, I love it when you write from your darker side and this is dark.
    A beautiful sonnet...perfection.

    All the best in the contest

    Love
    Sue


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    The queen of sonnet is at it again, what an interesting choice of topic too. Excellent as always. Best to you in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Damn!! Took me back in time this did! Powerfully done Sis! I've been "disfellowshipped" which is like being excommunicated... so know the feeling of being judged like this well! lol


  • melphleg gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Good flow and rhyme as always. Not to undermine the seriousness of the sin of Harlotry, but too many trials and excommunications have marred the church. It is a sad blot on Christianity done in the name of Christ. While excommunication is Bible, it has often been done in non biblical and unloving ways.


  • Alyzeh
    November 17, 2008

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    I enjoyed this. The rhymes flow amazingly..and the dark element makes this write so strong!

    Excellent work! Good luck in the contest.

    Love,
    Alyzeh


  • StarEyes
    November 17, 2008

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    Sis,

    What a read this one is! I love the dark, strong wording in this one! Great job!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Tirrell
    November 17, 2008

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    well told, The story aspect is strong and realistic. A nicely told history that fits the sonnet well. The music and rhythem of this is very enjoyable. Well done.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Strongly told and well built sonnet, lovely rhyme and flow, of course, and with a great dark character that you do so well



  • Ryan79
    November 17, 2008

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    I like the way you made it sound like a story. It has good rhythm. It made my picture the whole trial going on. Great choice of words too.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 17, 2008
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    A strong "persona" piece.

    • Amera gold member
      November 17, 2008
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      Thanks Sis, it must have been a past life.


  • malmadre gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Impeccable rhyme! a dark subject and a dark time for women. Powerful women are feared and have been since the beginning of time, I suppose many were "snuffed" and deemed as harlots, witches. I am glad those trials are over...are they over? This is a fine sonnet.


  • Titus gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Sired? mmm, the terminolgy is almost masculine to the soul, but invigorates a woman by this, who is strong and at times, worshipped by men and by this, becomes hardened herself at being used, if redeemed to having admit her downfall in the first place. This is a sad story of a woman who in this sonnet, you've projected a short biography, and from it, lots more insightfully is seen. Therefore, the book strangely, remains open for perusement.

  • Papagallo
    November 17, 2008
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    Most well done. A bit scary, for I know someone as you described in your verse.

    • Amera gold member
      November 17, 2008
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      You're kidding: I thought this was 9th century stuff.


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    This is a thought provoking sonnet but it was
    Such a dark time of intolerance of men
    The tragic burning times where so many loving souls where lost.
    Even in this age of enlighten men still twist the words of god to their will.
    I weep for Mother Earth is a woman and even today men still burn her.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 17, 2008

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    Ok, so one day make even the littlest mistake so I can see you're not perfect, or I will have you sanctified and you will be known as St. Amera. I think it has a nice ring.

    Oh yeh, nice sonnet you show here.


  • Faeryn
    November 17, 2008

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    This kind of reminds me of Anne Boleyn. I love it!! It's an amazing sonnet. The third stanza is my favorite and the ending couplet makes me feel srry for the woman and her children. Did you base the poem on a specific person in history?
    Love,
    Tay


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 17, 2008

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    wow, this was so alive that i could feel like i was there, looking upon this woman, i didn't know her story but i would think in that time i wouldn't care, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

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