love, let me be your bouquet.
lunchtime.
your car.
bring condoms.
the wife reads the credit card bills.
Author notes
Contest: Love Notes.
" ***Your note can be to anyone you love, desire, have a crush on"
A contest entry
- Passing A Note To All Poets by Dalaney.
750 points, ended November 23, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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biting lip.
I think you gave me a very
quirky, real, love note. Now....I am about
to laugh
Thank you soooo much for this one, Peter.
Love, Lane
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Gosh, I just read the other day (oh four maybe five months ago) where something along this very line happened... a florist sent a copy of a receipt to a home (bearing the nice romantic inscription) and, of course, the wife read it and realized that she had never received such a bouquet! DOH!!! The husband, thoroughly embarrassed, tried to sue the florist for damages... never heard how that one turned out. If anyone also remembers that and knows the outcome, feel free to drop a line. Anyway, nice encapsulation here of what is probably an all too common situation.
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lol... when i read it i thought it was gonna b summat bout a bondage prostitute lmao... but it was funny anyway... still... when it comes to romance i dont think theres any cost involved... my husband brings me feathers, rocks, things hes found in lifeline bins and they mean more to me than anything he could have bought. a great write. a good entry for the contest,
hugs,
georgie,
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The way this one begins, and then takes a sudden turn and then almost a flyover in the ending two... quite drags the reader in...
However, sounded a bit funny to me... A bit uncultured as per our perspective.
All the best in the contest.
Thanks for sharing.
.The Pole Star.
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I clicked on the title thinking it may be B & D - but almost as good!
Nice, terse, funny - and all too true. I hope you drove somewhere, didn't stay in the parking lot.
I liked the impersonal 'the wife' rather than 'my wife' - great showing of distance.
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Great
it's too simple and quite good, this surprises me you know...
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lol how funny and cute! (although i in no way condone affairs) lol but it is quite funny . great job!! i really did like it
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lololol
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