Dear lover,
it seems so long ago,
before time froze,
before the colors left,
before my mind was put to rest.
I just discovered,
the place you used to go,
my mind its picture disposed,
before the colors left,
before my mind was put to rest.
You and me, seemed like forever
nobody, no friends or foes,
would pull apart our souls,
before the colors left,
before my mind was put to rest.
But now dear lover,
my pain starts to grow,
you left because you said so,
and now the colors left,
and my mind will not rest.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt... by ariazephyrzoe.
1000 points, ended November 21, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Three Pre-writes by piccola.
800 points, ended November 27, 2008, 140 entries
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Comments
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The title is great ... before the colors left. That drew me in and the rest just kept me. Maybe we could get someone nice and soft to sing it.
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I love the title...I love what you did with repitition...how memories gradually fades...
I just discovered,
the place you used to go,
my mind its picture disposed,
before the colors left,
before my mind was put to rest.
I love this part a lot
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Anna Lee
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