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My Journey

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The path to Heaven straight and true
although so often fog I view
yet faith will always guide the way
and in God's hands I'll safely stay.

His beauty greets me all around
this bridge of passage most profound
my threads of life must never fray
and in God's hands I'll safely stay.

Sometimes I trip upon this bridge
my passage reaching blinding ridge
it's then for guidance that I pray
and in God's hands I'll safely stay.

The path to Heaven straight and true
and in God's hands I'll safely stay

Author notes

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/kyriellesonnet.html

Kyrielle Sonnet
A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet).
Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a
refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet
consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning
of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending
couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme
for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB (which I have used)

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  • individuality gold member
    June 25

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    a good formed piece of poetry, aye sometimes we stumble along the path of faith, but are always guided back to the light.


  • WordsDoMatter
    November 28, 2008

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    enjoyable

    Hi Alice, I'm new at this, and don't have any idea about poetic structures (I just know what I like), you had some great thoughts here, nice visuals... you took us to that bridge (a good thing for a writer to do). I struggled with "blinding ridge" it seemed like a force to rhyme with bridge... if it were me, I would consider rephrasing to have a more natural rhyme. I wonder since you said faith will guide you line 3 (I agree), why would you have to pray for guidance line 10? sorry if that is nit-picky, I'm really just trying to help and feeling my way around this what seems to be pretty cool site. - Kevin


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    November 24, 2008
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    As beautiful and soft as the picture.
    Well worthy of the gold.


  • Samplette gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    WOnderful! Truly a beautifully written Kyrielle Sonnet. Great imagery and word choice. Lovely. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    You write such beautiful sonnets, I am always at a loss for words to explain how they touch me, so beautiful. Best to you in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Sigh.. I always envy those with strong faith. This is lovely hun. I will be going to my church meeting tonight after reading this!

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