counted pennies
stacked high
against reason
every dollar
bought decision
watched cards fall
choices in suits
intent curved
bounced back
echoes me
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- Accepting Responsibility by celticwarrior.
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Wonderful word choices in what is a very subtle poem. Good job! Thanks for entering!
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Now I wonder if you were part of the stakes or just another gambler seeing if the cards give a positive return for efforts to learn the odds. The last three lines take the vision of a back room with gamblers crowded around a green table and make it feel that life is the gamble and the returns are not all good.
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Tom B.
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Tom, life is full of gambles but sometimes we play a hand knowing full well what the other players have up their sleeves. I think perhaps it gives us the upper hand.
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Juls
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watched cards fall
choices in suits
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lol and the joker ran wild for a few months until the Queen of Hearts declared 'Off with his head!!!' C
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