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insomnia stumbles
on the weighted wings
of boredom
and the clock-eyes
glare, with a pattern
never acknowledged
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night-sick is here;
an inundation of
anxieties
i am hard-pressed
to let go of
.
the fridge betrayed me,
for nothing but
week-old chinese
and swirling mold
but nestled in the door
a carbonated reminder
.
sometimes
a well placed semi-colon
is enough to make
my overtired muscles
smile-twitch
and secretly -
i am addicted to the
vicarious joys
of skilled snapshots
.
Author notes
This is a dedication to Jessica ( http://allpoetry.com/notorious ) who can make all the bad thoughts disappear with one wave of her talented pen 
... my favorite parts of her writing are the original metaphors and imagery - and her amazingly brilliant (really I can't say enough good words about them) snapshots of real life and people that she knows 
I definitely recommend that you check out her work!
Also - the carbonated reminder refers to her attempts to introduce me to the wonders of lemonade 
In a list
A contest entry
- Brag about your favorite AP poet by trekkergirl.
700 points, ended November 19, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is a draft - be as harsh as you like.
Comments
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Why yes I do like rereading this
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This is a wonderful, nicely-written, nice dedication to Jessica! How come I hadn't read it???
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Fuck! This is great.
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I like how you get through your days, you need someone to cuddle up to (heal the boredom)This is both amusing and worriesome re your mouldy chinese.
I loved the tongue in cheek attitude.
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This was nice, I could see how much she means to you (especially in the final two stazas). I could see where someone might be mistaken to interpret this as being about insomnia. I'm not as keen on lemonade as I used to be but I appreciate the reference. Cheers
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wow lemonaide huh? I like lemonaide too. Jessica sounds like a wonderful woman to me. Thanks for sharing it and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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hah first i thought that you were talking about insomnia
i like the bit of humor that you added to the last stanza, its cute. i love your imagery and how you really convey how much you look forward to reading her poetry after a long day.
great write and good luck in the contest!
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Outstanding
This is a great tribute poem to a fellow poet. I will have to check out her work. I liked how you described sleeplessness and the way the fridge let you down- mine gets raided so badly there is rarely anything left. This has some great images and I liked the alliteration in the last stanza. Best of luck in the contest.
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damn, pol. this is fab.
and hellz to the yes, foxy is amazing times infinity
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Hell yeah!! This is an awesome dedication to an awesome poet and person!! Jess
!!!
Everything you've said in the poem and your ANs is true!
Brilliant write!
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I'm not your favorite AP poet, I can't possibly be! LoL
I can't believe you wrote me a dedication poem...LMAO.
Wow, thanks a shitload
When you showed me those first 2 stanzas,
I had no idea what the context was...I thought maybe you were talking about well, insomnia.
But put the whole poem together and damn,
it's like a Pollack painting of AWESOMENESS.
I'm not sure I agree with everything you're saying...LoL, you're so flattering But this is so well-written.
jesus.
Did I say thank you already?
You know...
I actually do have insomnia.
It's probably self-induced, since I take these awful naps that kill my circadian rhythm.
"and the clock-eyes
glare, with a pattern
never acknowledged"
I ♥LOVEEEE it
Hmm...is this your way of saying I'm not acknowledging that my poetry is good? Because it's not.
LoL.
"the fridge betrayed me"
Kick-ass personification!! And LoL...when I open the fridge and don't find anything I want to eat, it's a betrayal of sorts.
"week-old chinese"
I'm Chinese As you know...LMFAO.
Mmm, I can picture you with a rotten muse (except your muse is never rotten) and well, it's comical.
"a carbonated reminder"
HELLS YEAH!
Here is your...online Post-it from me:
"Lemonade is good.
You are good."
"a well-placed semi-colon"
You are so much fun...I love how you've inserted both of us...what a great dedication poem this is, I'm honored.
"and secretly -
i am addicted to the
vicarious joys
of skilled snapshots"
Oh my...
it's not a secret anymore.
Again, I have to say I'm fucking honored you feel this way about my poetry.
*runs away with compliments*
Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I fucking love it, Lly.
♥ ♠ ∞ *insert other alt code here*
Jessicaaaaaaaaaaaa
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I'm so glad you liked it! I tell you all the time that I love your poetry - and somehow I knew you didn't believe me so I thought I'd try a different way of telling you!
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Well, it worked. LMFAO
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"Hmm...is this your way of saying I'm not acknowledging that my poetry is good? Because it's not. LoL. " <=== Not this shit again lol
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Heyyyy you're quoting me!
LMFAO.
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I'm so glad you think that is shit too somehow she just manages to be too overly-modest
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I can also be a prick.
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And a 'ho bag!!
Yep, she's wayyy too modest!
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You...BARBIE fruitbag douchie mofo.
That's right; the ultimate insult.
You're modest.
Sheesh.
It's like a poet's rite of passage.
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You know how the Barbie reference kills me!!! lol
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I know, right.
Okay...
you're a pelican corpse.
Better?
...what do pelicans look like?
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Big huge ass birds!!
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You're a dead huge ass bird?
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