The purity of your light
came melting to my eyes
I wished the night to stay
And day to never rise.
Ah! you were so alone
I wanted to know why
If only I had wings
If only I could fly.
I felt our souls were one
Now your pain was mine
Somehow I can't find words
That suffering was divine.
But alas came dawn
You faded in the sky
I begged you not to go
You vanished with a sigh.
You tied my thoughts to you
And took away my heart
But our love is deeper
For distance to depart.
A contest entry
- Fully by Mari Goes.
1300 points, ended November 22, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - only rhyme here :] by Ami.
550 points, ended April 17, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think.
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great write my favorite lines were..
"You tied my thoughts to you
And took away my heart
But our love is deeper
For distance to depart."
Great Write and
Thank You for entering my contest
Good Luck
-♥Amanda♥
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I can see you looking up at the moon, pondering these thoughts, these desires. It's bitter-sweet, with flourishes of beauty, yet sadness, and in its way, it expresses deeper thoughts. I'm glad you were inspired by the pictures
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mast !!!
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Thankyou!
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This is a poem full of emotoins.. I loved it very much.. the flow was smooth, the rhymed very nice.. BEst of luck in the contest
Keep writing
Love,
Lonely
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Hey, thankyou for your encouraging comment dear.
Glad you liked it!
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