Pushed under the waves as I tried to swim
Couldn't see the light; it was getting dim
Broken and battered, I lay feeling torn
I promised myself I would be reborn
To change the outer, I must change me too
To find the balance and know what to do
Hard work will come but this I have sworn
I promised myself I would be reborn
Many just wallow in their own ashes
I won't be one who accepts life's lashes
I refuse to lay here feeling forlorn
I promised myself I would be reborn
In the future, I'll have risen above
The pain that keeps me from finding true love
I'll have become one of the winterborn
Because I promised myself I would be reborn
Author notes
Prompt = 24. Trying to learn from what's behind you (Garth Brooks)
A contest entry
- Lines from Songs 25 PROMPT Contest by Paloszoo.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - change a suicidal's mind by BrittlesSkittles.
600 points, ended December 1, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I love how you took this and made an inspirational piece out of it! Well done! Thanks so much for taking the time to enter my contest. I’m honored to have you show your work here.
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wow. i admire your rhyme scheme. its beautifully and carefully chosen and it flows really well. the motif of being reborn is also touching. thank you for entering. =] good luck
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this is amazing, i can see hwo this could change a person's mind when you have moved passed the hard times in your life, what a great write, best of luck in the contest
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wow ..you actually made my teeth hurt with this one ..lo
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