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Poseidon

wisps of her hair
ebb and flow
in the salty breeze

emitting a light
breathtaking
in the dark, blue night

casting a glimmer
a glare
capping white waves

brighter than the sun
she shines
naked in the cool air

A contest entry

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 28, 2008

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    ooooh this is lovely... A beautiful take on the picture. Thank you for entering my contest.



    Delila