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Alone~


I close my eyes
I breath in deep
Imagining you here
While I sleep.

I see you there
In the moonlight
I could watch you sleep
all through the night.

I'm walking slowly past you
With that hunger in my eyes
Yearning for your hands
to touch between my thighs.

I'll lay you down on the bed
And spread open your legs
I crawl up to you
and get right in your face.

I'll smell you, while you are there.
I'll run my fingers through your hair.
I'll kiss you tenderly
...with love and compassion
You'll weep for me
With serene devotion.

I will hold you forever
when I come home.
And never again,
will you be alone.

Author notes

This is about my husband AND I. Written from BOTH points of view. I am private so I wrote in "abstract".

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  • Clovis6790Curious silver member
    March 9, 2009

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    Superb

    A very fine write. You expressed your thoughts quite well, indeed. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • e911
    March 9, 2009

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    Very passionate

    I really liked the poem. Very neat and the author's note makes it very personal. Sounds like you have a good thing going there.
    Only one suggestion - a couple of stanzas I had a hard time reading because of the background.


  • tenderheart22
    March 9, 2009
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    This is a great poem.
    Very deep and emotional.
    I love your choice of words.
    Keep it up

  • cles1396
    March 9, 2009
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    What beautiful writings


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 6, 2009

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    this is a good write from you. thank you for sharing it with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie

  • Francis Vincent
    March 4, 2009
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    close my eyes
    I breath in deep
    Imagining you here
    While I sleep.

    I see you there
    In the moonlight
    I could watch you sleep
    all through the night.

    I'm walking slowly past you
    With that hunger in my eyes
    Yearning for your hands
    to touch between my thighs.
    ng
    get it
    grow up
    a great poet does not pen soft soap
    i mean, lavendar porn
    no applauds for you
    get it


  • Chyanne
    February 8, 2009
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    You're not alone. I am here


  • ladylyric
    November 30, 2008
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    Very passionate and full of emotion..I also really loved the "every other line rhyme". Great work.


  • biggdoggspaz5000
    November 17, 2008
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    this is a very good poem i love the emotion in it its a great write i love it so much I'll smell you, while you are there.
    I'll run my fingers through your hair.
    I'll kiss you tenderly
    i love those lines i feel the passion in your poem i cant stop thinking about this poem lol well great job stay true stay sic and peace out

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