Falling into the fire
Under duress. You burn.
Cover yourself as you disintegrate...
Kill the sounds of your scream.
Sing aloud the words of wisdom
Heat brings to your body.
Insight into that oft trespassed world
Terrifies you. One way tickets only.
Ignorance is bliss they say.
Hurting yourself to hurt me
And get your revenge makes you sick.
Tell the world how I wronged you!
Everyone will listen to your sobs...
Tell the world how I wronged you!
How I am the fool,
And how your world is better without me.
Tell me, who's the fool now?
I await your response...
Laughing as I am, as you scream-
Over your pleads for forgiveness...
Vicious circle. You burnt me first.
Eventually you'll realize your mistake.
You can't crawl back now...
Only sanity is left and he wants to run,
Uttering the words (under his breath) down the side of this poem.
Author notes
"She ricochets and you don't notice"
A little darker than I usually write...
Meh!
(AA!)
A contest entry
- Impress me, Challenge yourself. Options. by XxrockxXxgirlxX.
1400 points, ended November 22, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I want your darkest of dark poetry. by Chelse-Oh.
950 points, ended November 21, 2008, 29 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sadistic Intent by Synthetic-Nightmare.
1200 points, ended January 6, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do you have any favourite lines???
Comments
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WOW!
This was very tense and extremely emotional. I loved your word use and the descriptions painted here. I ESPECIALLY LOVED how creative you were wiht the main message! Thanks for entering and good luck, hun
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You always seem to write the words that i just need to read...i love this. I have to read it again!
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Very clever! Nicely done. I liked this a lot. And no, I do not have any favorite lines, I loved it all. Thank you for entering ~Chelsey
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the wording was fantastic and the title really caught me
a great poem
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WOW! This is outstandign! I really like this! You captured great emotion, and I think you should write more poems like this (if you can!!!) Keep it up!
Lillie
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My fave piece hehehe
Tell the world how I wronged you!
How I am the fool,
And how your world is better without me.
Tell me, who's the fool now?
I love this and totally know who its about hehe
the acrostic is very clever!!! xx
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