as i watched you walk away,
tears running down both of our faces.
did I betray you?
did i hurt you?
what have I done to create this?
i hate to see you walk away,
when I want you here by my side.
not only am I hurt,
I feel lost.
my heart is yearning for you to stop,
my soul is bursting from the need to scream your name.
that need for you to stop never left,
I really don't want it to.
When you walk by me and smile as a sign of peace,
my heart sinks a little more
but inside I know
that more than friendship lies
behind that smile.
so I will always know,
that I have not lost you.
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does he still love me? what do you think?
Comments
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Wow!
This is really good..
Thank you for enetering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! -
This sounds more like a lot of confusion on his side and a lot of not-letting-go on yours. It feels like if you both took a step back, and thought about it, you might just re-meet in the middle. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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Awe this really heart breaking. I felt the emotion as I read each line. You did wonderfully with the prompt. My dear friend we might seem like we lost something but honestly we never really lost something we just passed it on to someone else to have a chance with it. Very sad but yet so beautiful. I really liked this. I enjoyed reading your poem. It was very heartfelt and I liked that. You showed the readers what you been through for such a personal thing you were brave to show it to others to see if they can relate in a way. My favorite lines were
" When you walk by me and smile as a sign of peace,
my heart sinks a little more
but inside I know
that more than friendship lies
behind that smile.
so I will always know,
that I have not lost you."
Beautiful lines.
good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
- Maria ♥
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I think he might be confused, he doesn't know if he loves you or if he just wants to be friends...I love the poem!
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