We ran wild
through fields
climbing fences
to freedom on
unbridled horses
landing in creek
where bare skin
dried in the sun,
hay lofts held
secret tunnels
and a place to fly
never think about
danger or what should
or should not be
we just lived.
Author notes
impulse
A contest entry
- impulse; everyone needs it by written-in-ink.
700 points, ended November 27, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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love the imagery
I love the imagery you use in your poem,
It was wonderful to read,
Thank you,
Best wishes,
Isabella
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and that is the way that i feel it should always be
we should alwys live like that
always
man
hahah
i know whta this means
thank you for entering and good luck
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Sounds like the order of the day.
Change the horses to bikes, the creek to the ocean and the loft to a garage and this coulda been a day I knew. Fantastic memories relived of summer days of youth. Great write sweetheart. Best to you.
Love,
Sun and stars shine no brighter than you!
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I love this, but have one suggestion...maybe remove 'for' in the last line? It reads just fine without it.
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This is a wonderful take on the prompt. Your words remind me of my grandmother's childhood stories. I also recall some of these awesome times as a kid when I never gave a thought to getting hurt. Good luck in the contest. I love this!!!
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Oh to be that uninhibited and free again hey! Beautiful write sis!
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Great Write
great write,...strong imagery,...I felt like I was right there with you,....Wish I had been,...I'm sure you'll do well with this one,....Good luck in the contest.....Love & Light,....me, -
I remember doing this as kids with my sister, brought back so many great memories and I got washed away in a flood of tears, thanks for giving me that gift. Best to you in the contest
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A beautiful take on the prompt, very nostalgic, sometimes we wonder how we survived the things we did. But as you said, "we just lived", wouldn't have had it any other way.
Wonderful...Best wishes in the contest
Love
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Wonderful imagery in this! I can just imagine you doing all this when you were younger too, you free spirit
Too often we lose those impluses through society's expectations.
All the best with this lovely piece.Great take on the prompt
Gaylene
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so much freedom in this write. love it (:
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