Endeavor casts a blazing crown
Into the starry host renown
The fuel of passion and of doubt
Astounding thoughts revealing shouts
Abilities enshrined above
The inner quest for God and love
Perplexing souls prepare the flight
Into the second heaven's light
Give me this day my daily bread
Such glory rests above my head
The galaxies define His mind
An image in the mirror I find
Author notes
Job 38:7 -- When the morning stars sang together, And all the sons of God shouted for joy?
Photo credit - REUTERS/Kevin Kolczynski (UNITED STATES)
A contest entry
- Endeavor - photo prompt by thelordreigns.
550 points, ended December 13, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i like that word. endeavor. and i love rhyming poems. ^^ they are my favorites. but shh dont tell anyone because ppl wont enter my contests. lol. the poem is awesome too!! its like amazing
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Blessed
Wow! Not only does this poem reflect a beautiful understanding of faith, it also has an amazing rhythm. 5/5
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Beautifully interpretation of the picture!
It is so awesome to think of how our amazing triune God created the heavens!
Thanks so much for your entry and all my wishes for a blessed season of family, friends, and abundant life!
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I really loved this the rythm and flow were amazing and the descriptions excellent. My favourite has to be 'The galaxies define His mind an image in the mirror I find' . It was extremely inspiring thank you for sharing such amazing wonder. Well done.
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very nice!
I loved the different descriptions you used, and there were some really good insights, i.e., the image in th mirror, we were made in God's image... very good. Made me think. well done - Kevin
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Great Depth
This piece has great depth of meaning and brings to mind that which is of the greatest importance: God and His Christ, our Lord and Saviour. You've also used words that not only apply to the picture, fuel and light and flight, yet they also apply to the overal message about life and what we seek, or should seek, during our time here.
The only problem here is technical: improper use of punctuation. When a poem is written without proper punctuation and each line is capitalized, then punctuation should not be used at all. And, when you use elipses to denote a pause, it should be three only (. . .) with a space between each dot.
Otherwise, it needs no improvement, for you have written a beautiful poem full of meaning and truth. Great work!
Much love in Christ, BonnieQ 
(former publisher's editor and published author)
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Thankyou for your help
Yes, He is all glorious and worthy, amen. Thankyou so much for your help I will try and revise this without punctuation and correct the elipses. Thanks for taking the time to read it and for all your help.
castaway
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This is awesome girl! Your thoughts are clear and easily understood. I look forward to more from you. Thought provoking, indeed!
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This is a good way to start the day thinking about I think.Great thoughts.Easy to understand.Clear in their message.Good luck in the contest.
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