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But you are gone

The sun rises burning sensitive eyes
It brings only the promise
Of another day
Filled with pain,

The razor is next to the sink,
Calling my name and promising relief,
One by one crimson drops flow
Staining the porcelain below,

I blink away the tears
Thinking of the years,
That we were together
You even said it would be forever,

But that driver didn't care
The only thing he shared,
Was the front of his car
You didn't even fall that far,

Blood pooling around my feet
I struggled to find your heart beat,
You reached up and we shared one last kiss
I am now stuck in that moment of bliss,

For you are dead
Your life came to an end,
That day in September
I will always remember,

Author notes

I was going out with someone for 3 years and this september we were walking back to my house from a party and as we crossed the street a drunk driver hit us both, while I survived Alley died before the paramedics arived, since then life has lost its color for me, i hope this is emo enough for the contest

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  • Horcrux.Breathing
    January 16

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    This is amasingly written the flow is indescribebly beautiful.in the begging you really caputerd the emotions of relif that cutting gives you perfectly. well done my friend


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    December 12, 2008
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    Oh my word. This is really really sad, I am so sorry for your loss. The line that really moved me was:

    You reached up and we shared one last kiss

    After reading that I just couldn't hold back the tears. This was just so heart breaking to read.

    Congratulations on the gold.

    Take care

  • Patradora
    November 29, 2008
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    Wow, I think my heart just broke a little.


  • Joshua DePesa
    November 29, 2008

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    This is so sad. It holds more emotions that I can name, and so much more. This deserves to win!

    Best wishes.


  • xXtired-of-cryingXx
    November 16, 2008
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    *tears!*

    This is so sad! I am litturally crying now, Is this a true story? If so I am really sorry, I truely feel for you. I love the emotion, and imagery! This is so far deffinetly my favorite poem in the contest!

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