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"I love you."

 

 

Your words are fresh razor blades,
plunging into my failing heart,
and I'm desperately trying--
   trying to get them to stop,
but they are all my ears can hear.

                "I love you."

It's as if you've never known about the truth,
because your tongue only speaks of deceit,
and with every word dripping off your lips,
my flesh freezes like ice sickles on a roof top--
   and there's no sun to thaw it out.

                "I love you."


Just like our song stuck on repeat;
your biggest lie sticks to the edges of my mind,
stealing my heart and leaving me hollow.
And just like a winter night--
    the darkness takes over leaving no tomorrow.

 

 

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2-"Tomorrow dies as i remember the words 'I Love You' " Ken-Maverick
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  • Alyzeh
    November 23, 2008
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    Wow. This is an amazing dedication. *Sigh* I love dedications, they just make me so happy! I mean, I feel happy for the people who get dedicated poetry! Haha.

    This was a brilliant write, so heart felt. Good luck to you in the contest and thanks for entering


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    awwwww

    so sad, but nicely writen and descriptive, good luck and thanks for entering, love you.
    Stephanie ♥


  • Hope Angel silver member
    November 16, 2008

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    Awwwww
    The descriptions you used are amazing, and your poem is amazing. Your poetry is so much better then it was when I first talked to you. lol
    I hope you aren't feeling like this though.
    I love you and good luck in the contest


    • my.stars.dont.shine
      November 16, 2008
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      Thanks. =)
      Eh, just a little, not too bad. Im over it a lot actually.
      I love you too, thanks.

      • Hope Angel silver member
        November 16, 2008
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        Your welcome.
        Well, that's good that you over it a lot. I'm sorry that you feel like that just a little though.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    This is sad

    • my.stars.dont.shine
      November 16, 2008
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      Yeah. Im not even that sad. I guess its just things prompts can bring out. =) Im over it a lot more then I thought I would ever be toug.

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