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Daddy Darling

Nights shower through me
as my eyes glisten
looking at the moon
as it gazes through the streets
Traffic never ends
in the city that never sleeps

I lay upon my bed
my blanket in one hand
my teddy in the other
and wait
wait for you to return
my eyes shall not close
my ears shall not quit listening
and my heart shall not quit aching

Five sunrises

have passed by

and no sign of you

I can hear mommy crying

I can see

the pain in her smile

as she tucks me in

and tells me a story

the same story you've read to me

the one with the princess

and her gardien angel

 

Where is my gardien angel mommy?

Where is my daddy?

 

There she goes again

shedding a tear

as she holds me near

a tear drop

falls upon my cheek

she takes a deep breath

and finally tells me

 

'' Sweetheart

daddy is gone now

and he won't be back

remember when mommy

got all dressed up yesterday

and told you i'd be back soon

with my black dress i left you with

Rubby your teddy bear

and the nanny by your side?

Mommy went to church

to say goodbye to daddy''

 

But why mommy?

Where is daddy going?

I need my gardien angel

he promised he'd always be there

That he'd never leave me

 

'' Daddy went to a better place

one where he will always watch over you''

 

Did daddy die like in the book?

 

''Yes sweetheart,

daddy died''

 

There i was

in my mothers arms

waiting

for my gardien angel

to come back

and finish my story

 

I'll wait

day and night

until he comes back

to tuck Rubby and I in

until the day comes

i'll watch the sun set

and the moon light the night

 

Until he comes back

 

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8. Midnight Angel
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  • Dobar Dan
    November 19

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    Sad Poem

    But repeated over many times I'm sure - Very noce flow to this poem - and the content very nicely done - Keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe dobar dan -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- peace on Earth and goodwill towards men


  • Rinoasis
    December 9, 2008

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    May I just say that the blue background against the dark blue text kinda hurts my eyes and it's a bit hard to read. There are some minor grammatical errors too that I think you should correct.
    But regardless.. about the poem: I think you developed a very interesting concept about the pic. When I looked at it, I thought of something like a guardian angel holding a baby in my mind but never what you wrote about. The write itself is really sad.

    Thanks for entering my contest!
    Blessings,
    ~Moonchild


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    oh, this is really sad. really good write ~


  • DogFish silver member
    November 16, 2008
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    ...a tear in the eye, for sure!