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Defiant faith



I refuse,
to drown in this struggle
that surrounds my hope-less tears.

Though tender dreams,
have been cruelly crushed,
and I felt not..gods love near.

I ache,
the  urge within me
to lay down my life and heart.

For this pain,
that breathes serves only to remind,
I am, boldly, still and alive.

Fearless,
not powerless to grasp a fragment
of heavens love and might.

Today, I deny
the graves of earth,
my last humble tear wept, still and alive.
Defiant faith.








Dedicated to my ap son:
Limelightliasion


































Author notes

Contest prompt: the picture prompt above. 86 words...must be kept under 100 words.
Beautiful artistry of : Trapped by manips-of-artist2

Many thiefs of life we sometimes must face,
but none can steal..that one final tear of hope, love, and faith,
and that's truly what makes us such awe inspiring magnificent creatures.


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  • BearWoman gold member
    April 27

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    I felt the authenticity of this piece shining throughout. It is a very powerful write and meets the picture prompt beautifully.


  • Lowell Poe
    March 26

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    Stunning and inspiring.
    The human condition personified in hope and despair...
    sad and beautiful lass.

    Blessings,
    Lowell Poe

  • poetchile
    March 10
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    very deep and penetrating, bordering on the edge
    of pain and darkness.

  • Macsword
    March 10
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    Excellent

    Today, I deny the graves of earth...

    Wonderful and encouraging line.


  • Wolfdog silver member
    March 9

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • sunoir
    January 6
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    Powerful so deserving of that gold. Bravo!!

  • celadia
    December 14, 2008
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    Oh, wow, a gold, this really deserved one, it reminded me of the person who is going wrong who we never lose sight of, never give up on and eventually, they come around. I was like that once.


  • fernandafreire
    December 6, 2008

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    BRAVO.. SUPER!!
    I could feel this poem...especially this part:

    I ache,
    the urge within me
    to lay down my life and heart.

    WAY TO GO!!
    Cheers,
    Fern...


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    The photo brought the whole thing to life Kathleen! what a lovely pic and a soul-stirring write!!! everytime I read something new you've written, I am in awe of the hard work you put into your poetry. you're range is so far above mine my sweet friend,and I am so proud to be riding under your poetic wings!!! you so inspire me to keep writing!!!

    Love, SilverButterfly
    Mary


  • Tristania
    November 29, 2008

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    Lovely!Spellbinding and enchanting!Everything is absolutely beautiful!Every last word,the colors,the artwork,the title...all perfect!You captivate me and this poem shows the master(you)are indeed a genius!Pure of heart and soul you proudly shout and fight to keep the demons at bay,bringing us all that much closer to Heaven!The age of enlightenment and rebel freedom fighters is reborn!There is still a goal we need to reach and still many causes to be fought for, so now is not the time for us to sit still and quiet.
    We as a species have not yet earned a spot by our creators' side,and therefore we must continue to prove our worth!You and I will help to get us to that point where we can simply sit back and enjoy the view.
    We may be closer or farther than any of us knowsbut we will never find out if we do and say nothing.You make our maker proud!


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    THIS IS AN EPIC POEM, BEAUTIFUL AND MOVING, AND POIGNANT AT A TIME WHEN MANY ARE STRUGGLING WITH THEIR FAITH.NICE WRITE INDEED.THANKYOU


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    this is a beautiful poem. one that I'm so glad that I read. this to me is a very powerful poem. faith is something that is a constant struggle for me, it has been since I can remember. I think that you've done a fantastic job with this poem.
    Congratulations on the Gold Trophy..

    kat


  • KayJay
    November 27, 2008

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    Wow... beautifully stated and so deserving of the gold (Congratulations, by the way ) I think all faith is defiant but you've managed to distill this, focusing on overcoming the doubts that plague us all... Bravo for a courageous write.
    Ken


  • tawk gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    If we lost our hope and faith then where would we all be? Amazing write so full of vivid imagery and emotions. I so enjoyed reading thanks for sharing. Congrats on the gold well deserved. hugs Theresa


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    "Fearless,
    not powerless to grasp a fragment
    of heavens love and might."
    beautiful and powerful piece...congrats on the gold


  • Panicked-Puppet-xXx
    November 18, 2008

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    Beautiful, simply beautiful...

    Outstanding work. This write is rich with imagery and depthful emotions, pushing us to pursue life that sometimes seems a hopless cause and fruitless effort. It holds strength exceeding what mere words can speak, yet you took the prompt head on and flew beyond expectations, producing a poem that inspires hope and a will to live. Please keep writing. And once again exquisite job. Happy holidays, and congratulations on the gold. You did a fine job and deserved it...


  • Paloszoo gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    This is beautiful and graciously uplifting. Subtly powerful! Well deserving of the gold, indeed. BRAVO, my friend!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    Defiant yes! Sometimes we have to be against all that looks to pull us down! Wonderfully worded!


  • faderman1959
    November 17, 2008

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    Wonderful! Never surrender I say! That is the message I took from your poem and I must say you did it beautifully!


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 17, 2008
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    what a beautifully written piece. I like stanza 4. and you worked a great rhyme into this. Good luck


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    I really like this, a very powerful piece yet gently put, if that makes a lick of sense..lol. I especially like verse four, very strong lines. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    i hear ya...it is an interesting prompt...
    "defiant faith"
    sometimes we truly have to roll up our sleeves
    and take a few worldly punches to demonstrate
    it's power....
    "defiant faith"
    I might run a contest on it.


  • sunoir
    November 16, 2008

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    a wonderful write it felt true to the pic prompt and to life's
    angst and the hope we all live for.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 16, 2008

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    beautiful sad and skillfully written, i mean that this was strong as it brought the picture to life, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

  • celadia
    November 16, 2008

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    A couple of things first, 'God's love' is the way it should be and then 'powerless' no dash. Other than that this poem is exponentially better than your best so far. It says a lot and it says it well.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    wow

    great write! very effective and powerful imagery..as always a strong message of hope..really great stuff my friend lots of luck in the contest.

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