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Last And Only Fight

i think nows the time for me to die..
ive taken to long to say goodbye..
your eyes are chocking in my lies
and im too stupid. to cry...

just make this.. your last wish
your stable in dismiss..
your trials your headaches
but u cant kill those mistakes..
what have i done...
ive killed everyone..
ive killed myself..
with my only pun..

if this is why im falling.
then lets make this right,,
If this is why I'm calling it my last and only fight.
if i cant stand alone again.
will u give me your hand.
cause I'm finding it hard, so hard to understand.

I thought about this place,
Ive thought about it when,
I cant believe I'm stuck between,
This holy hell and bend,
My misuse.. and I'l cope with the abuse..

Just make this.. your last wish,
Your taking the piss,
Your trials your headaches,
Those painful heartbreak,
What have I done?

If this is why I'm falling,
Then lets make it right,
Is this is why I'm calling it my last and only fight,
If i cant stand alone again,
Will  u give me your hand,
Cause I'm finding it hard so hard to understand..

And so i take my last breath and I'm hopeless,
If this is why I'm calling it my last and only fight,
Then close your eyes and say goodnight.

Poem i wrote for my love :)

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  • Lily of The Valleys
    November 16, 2008

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    So, I've read some of your poems. Things that you are developing and should try out are ways of wording your poetry

    Instead of repeating a word, use another. Such as

    ive killed everyone..
    ive killed myself..

    I've killed everything
    Slain myself with pun.

    Your poetry has a lot of imagination. It's got so much potential. I'm looking forward to what you do with my advice. it's a beautiful poem.

    Best Regards,
    Holly

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