In places I have crashed,
again,
to appreciate life.
Memories that level me;
a bubble centered
between parallel lines,
and I knew it was accurate
because Jesus was a carpenter.
A contest entry
- What Are You Feeling? by Simone Brooklyn.
1050 points, ended November 25, 2008, 33 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Another great poem.
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thank u much
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This poem is like the spokes of a bike wheel in that you can go many ways with it. That is the mark of a good poem
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thank u very much, that is kind of you
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it's something about the fragmented depth of it all that makes the beauty of this peom stand it..good work brah!!!
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It takes a lot for a poem to really catch my eye, and this sure did it. Good luck in my contest.
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Beautiful write here
I so loved this so very much
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GREAT write!!
Wow...love your thoughts here !! Well done.
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thanks a lot for reading it. always happy to hear from you
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a bubble centered between parallel lines---
the meat of this one
the heart
the metaphor reminding me of balance
well done
the mention of carpenter... makes me want this in a light tan (woody) background with a dark dark brown font color... but thats just me since the conversation in here went there
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well i tried a new color, it was the best i could do lol. thanks for your input, it really makes me feel good when high level writers take the time to help the novice. it really changes the mood. thanks so much, much love and respect.
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Pretty good writing and feelings here.Good luck in the contest.I think that i would add something more to this but I am not sure what,maybe a backround change would help it?
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thanks so much. i wish i could find a background that could fit this, im not good at that though. thanks for taking the time to read it, much love and respect.
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