Mists of deep entrapment
worship at her feet
with songs of no tomorrows
rhapsody complete.
Trapped inside those graveyard swirls
bodies walk alone
searching for a life now lost
naked and unknown.
Dressed in black abandonment
she watches without care
with eyes that never sleep
in a dark eternal stare.
Beware the mists, beware her eyes
deny her lullaby
or you will taste the darkness
in mists of your goodbye.
Author notes
Option - 19. Surrounded by the Mists
Picture Credit :
http://i38.tinypic.com/5mn8qt.gif
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt: BREATH-TAKING FANTASY! by Rinoasis.
700 points, ended December 9, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellent
What a great creation for the prompt. So very creative. Congratulations on the silver.
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I think the two last stanzas are the most powerful ones in this poem. Your words describe exactly what I have in mind when I look at this picture. The "eyes that never sleep" part sounds almost creepy.. makes me wonder if she ever gets tired of standing there, awake.
Your poem makes this woman seem like a threat to all souls with her mists and I like that. Very dark, indeed!
Thanks for entering my contest!
Blessings,
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Just so wonderfully dark and I do so admire t=your flair for rhyme!. Excellent!
All the best with this
gaylene
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wow...this is dark...like the subtle rhyme in this piece ~
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Lovely and dark, what a fantastic interpretation of this prompt, the visuals were outstanding. Best to you in the contest
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